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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
these cold chills, remind me of the pills when they were toxic, hidin 'em in boxes they made me fell good, runnin through the woods almost died, everynight i cried my happiness was denied, the chills, the pills runnin up and down the hills all memories of a kid, who has since then hid no one knows, all the trouble i am owed so here it comes, no startin to run all coming back now... the chills, the pills it all kills !respect the alphabet! |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
all dem blue and yellow purple pills.. omg man.. u and that marshall- i just dont get it. good write, yo, good write. (i'll never get a hug again, man... what a hummer bummer, lol) |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
 to the pills.  hope you get enlightenment soon Dinky... Are you scared? |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
you dont have the critique flag up.. so *holds tongue* but i will say this, i liked the poem, but i think that the rhymin took away from it a bit. to me it was just too forced or stressed. but thas just me, and im a freak myself so ill just shuddap now.  nice write, post more.“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
thx for the replys sara- u will get a hug again, very soon so dont sweat it. i luv that line in there, u no which one(i talked to u bout it, u betta remember) cherish- thx for the reply i will say no to the pills knightlyshadows- i luv rhyming so much that sometimes i guess i do force it, bad habit but i will try not to force it so much in the future, thx for replyin and bein honest ~sam~ |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
i liked it sam i think thatz it my fave poem of yourz do u no whut i was talking about in my last post tho?????  |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
HEy yo! This was awesome. (my opinion) I kinda liked the rhymin. Sara....U r right. You and that darn marshall. Right when i started readin i was like "those blue and yellow purple hills (pills)"LOL Good write. *Allison* |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This poem gave me thrills and chills and made me want to run around in the hills. Was it just me? |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Sam- I`m home sick today and i`ve been watchin LOADS of tv. On MTV I swear to god it is like "Eminem" day.LOL. I saw the video for "Blue and Yellow Purple Hills".I`ve seen it before but I caught a few things I never had noticed b4. There is this scary clown that chases these kids around! And there is also a dancing cactus.LOL.Then they had this show "Jammed" and Michigan State got to get the first showing ever of 8 Mile and then...little did they know that Eminem was behind the screen and he gave them a live performence! I am green with ENVY! LOL I`ll ttyl. Bye Bye! *Allison* |
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