You keep asking me to bleed

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Teen Poetry #6

You keep asking me to bleed

Faye
Junior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 14
The world of Dreams&Memories

0 posted 2002-11-04 11:26 PM

the bullet hears my song
the gun feels hate
but i do not pull the trigger
because it does not hate
but only love
for you only feel the car
but i fell it all
so where do the two come in
it is not in life
but in death
but i shall never ask you to bleed
cause blood leads to death

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-11-04 11:39 PM

An interesting mix of personifications and metaphors... lovely imagery, with some very tangible feeling.

A very well written poem. I would have liked to see it extended, but the choice is always yours.

Parasite

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