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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

0 posted 2002-11-04 08:47 PM

Dead dreams and focal points
lay at my feet, staring into my eyes
I let them die because I was scared
didn't know how to nurture them
Now they're no more
I'll never again have the chances I let
slip through my fingers
and the mistakes I made I can only try
to rectify in the future
and not make the same ones again...
but the dead dreams are still dead,
and the focal points of my life are gone

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

1 posted 2002-11-04 09:11 PM

awww...

this is really sad.

(but good job)

"I slipped away
farther from you,
trying to find what is real.
You're somebody else
that I never knew,
and someone that I cant feel."

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

2 posted 2002-11-04 09:15 PM

I liked this is was a bit sad but it was good keep it up!!i like the cool hat smiley dont u ????

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

3 posted 2002-11-04 09:36 PM

i thought this was going to be about food~! o love food.
but i liked your poem almost like food.
keep up the writing

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-11-04 11:10 PM

A lot of emphasis on feeling here... as I've come to expect from you. I only wonder what happened at dinner time?

Enjoyed the read, Rhonda. Another poem well done.

Parasite

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

5 posted 2002-11-04 11:39 PM

A superb write, Rhonda.... I'm quite impressed. This one feels like you put a lot of thought, emotion, feeling.... heart into it. Like it's most personal to you. Written splendidly, dear.

Don't ever question your talent again. Or I'll tickle you.

Sincerely,
Titus

"A life unexamined is not worth living."
-Socrates

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

6 posted 2002-11-05 01:13 AM

Great poem!! I think this is how it is throughout our life with way too many things. The important thing is that you realized where you went wrong and that you let a great opportunity slip away and u know not to for the future. It's a learning opportunity and everything happens for a reason.

Sometimes I get so weird
I even freak myself out
I laugh myself to sleep
It's my lullaby

aVriL lAvIgNe

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2002-11-05 02:22 PM

Rhonda~
This is not just a wonderful poem...this is your heart.
Funny thing about 'dead' dreams, though...they
can be reborn, if we just believe in them.
You've expressed these emotions very well, my friend.
Big HUGS,
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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