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Denea Furr
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0 posted 2002-11-03 02:59 AM


I gave you my all and everything that I had.
There was nothing you could do to make me mad.
For you I made myself everything I could be,
but your worst mistake was cheating on me.
I thought I felt love when I was with you,
but you ripped my heart slowly in two.
I dealt with my grief and fought through my pain,
but when I see you with her I feel it all over again.
I can not blame her because of your mistake.
She has no idea that you are so fake.
I wish I could tell her how lousy you are,
but that wouldn't help get me very far.
I know that we are over we're done we're through,
you are out of my mind, there is no more of you.



© Copyright 2002 Denea - All Rights Reserved
quietlydying
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the wonderful land of oz
1 posted 2002-11-03 03:06 AM


good write and thanks for sharing.

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!

i hope you enjoy it here.

/jen/


what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-03-2002 03:06 AM).]

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2 posted 2002-11-03 11:55 AM


    Wonderfull Heartfelt Poem    
[WELCOME TO PASSIONS



[This message has been edited by Wind (11-03-2002 11:57 AM).]

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3 posted 2002-11-03 05:43 PM


Welcome to Passions! I thouroughly enjoyed this poem and look forward to reading more of your work! I hope you enjoy your experience here, and if you have any questions, please feel free to email any of the moderators!
Welcome again!!

PS. Check your email for a special greeting!

NSnaomian
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4 posted 2002-11-03 06:25 PM


Wow! What a way to start! Welcome passions, deary! I look forward to seeing more of your writings.
In this one, I know just what you mean, I've been there too.
I'm glad you are through it and hope you find someone that makes you happy!
Great job.

Laura

Real friends are those who, when you feel you've made a fool of yourself, don't feel you've done a permanent job.

cherish
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swimming in fairy floss...........
5 posted 2002-11-03 06:38 PM


Heartbreak sucks major arse...especially when it involves a cheater. You seemed to express yourself well through poetry. This was an enjoyable read

Welcome Denea!


Thanks for sharing, hope you find something here which strikes your fancy

Are you scared?                            BOO! Are you now?

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6 posted 2002-11-04 01:31 PM


A strong flow and some good images.  I very much enjoyed the content of this piece.

Welcome to Passions in Poetry.  I hope you enjoy reading, replying and sharing with all the rest of us here.  Oh, and if you want something fun to try out, check out our latest biweekly challenge...   it's just above the topics list, on the left.

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vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...
7 posted 2002-11-05 11:52 AM



Denea~
Welcome to Passions!
This is a wonderful introductory post,
and I look forward to seeing much more from you.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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