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foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

0 posted 2002-10-31 09:16 PM

What did I do to deserve this?
What did I do to see?
All those things
And then that kiss
You gave her instead of me.
Don't tell me you didn't.
We both know you can't lie.
But please tell me
Why is it
That no matter how hard I try
You never talk to me now
Never listen to what I have to say.
Tell me why must it always be that way?
What happened to us?
Where's all that trust?
I'm not gonna stand here and fight.
Just give me an answer
That's all I ask
And I hope you decision is right.

[This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (11-01-2002 11:09 PM).]

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

1 posted 2002-11-01 01:17 PM

Hey! great poem. I enjoyed the rhyme scheme. it read very fast and very easy. That, and I liked the words you chose. Very unique, in a poetry world with nothing but freeverse you come in and lay down some rhymes.

I will be lookin' for more of your stuff.
Keep writing.

Darkness

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-11-01 09:33 PM

sounds firmiliar....cant lie. LOL. Good one!
*Allison*

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

3 posted 2002-11-02 12:51 PM

hey,
i liked this one (i always want my replys to be long well not necessarily long but i want them to be more then one or 2 lines and normally i just keep rambling on about stuff that dont even matter and that ends up making it longer even tho i didnt really mean to ramble on about it, kinda like this lol)
but anywayz good write
~sam~

!respect the alphabet!

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

4 posted 2002-11-02 08:36 PM

Sad topic... Great poem! lol Emotions always do make for some wonderful writing... much like this poem actually! I gotta say I really liked it. Keep it up!
[This message smiley free since 11/2/2002 8:36:10 PM]

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

5 posted 2002-11-02 10:49 PM

Guys suck!!!
And so do guys that give kisses to other people instead of you!
(cough cough)
yea.. sam rablems alot.
This poem this good though.
I think someone drugged me, Cathy.. because my room's all somkey.. unless i'm smokin a joint Matuze gave me without my knoing..

My mom was humped by a robot. ahhhh hahahaa

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