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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
They all know what I did. You know what I did,but I did it for you. You have to understand But you won't You should understand But you don't. So here I stand all alone Without you. [This message has been edited by foreverwithyou (10-30-2002 10:13 PM).] |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
Hope this one is alright |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Good one cath. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
This is a very nine poem, albeit somewhat sad... I know how if feels when someone dosen't understand.. I feel your pain. Well, it was a nice poem regardless, so good things can come from anything. After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here? Oh well, can't say it's not worth it. |
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anawnda Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 113 |
i like this poem alot, its short and it grabs at you and makes you feel the same way, it has all the emotions needed in one paragraph, wonderful write!=) |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I admit I like the way you oddly rhymed "won't" and "don't." That kind of struck me. This is alright. I liked it.  Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
ahhh! my leg itches!!!!! (good write) |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, i was searchin and everythign and i just realized i didnt reply to this it was very good and sry i didnt reply b4 but hey, better late then never and really well, it sint late cuz u can reply whenever u want, u no?? and now it is back up at the top for more ppl to read, but anywayz... good write ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
this was good...i liked it " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Alone Afraid n' Away Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 19 |
I liked it.. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Good expressions, I know how it is with the not understanding. WinterWren |
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moonguardian2004 Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 64MA, USA |
i totally know the feeling of this poem. you have a great way to bring your feelings out in such a short poem. great job! Meredith |
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Stinky Twinkie Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 204Dinwiddie |
Did anyone else find it odd that foreverwithyou wrote a poem called "Without You"? anyway, it was well written. -Stinky Twinkie- |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oooh, a few shivers down my back from this one. Eerie how well I understand what you're saying. Well done No, on second thought, let's not go to Camelot. |
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Sweetpoet16m4u04 Member
since 2002-11-10
Posts 153Ma, U.S.A |
Hey I just wanted to say what a great write to be short and to the point like that. Trust me i also know how that feels. Keep writing. Chris |
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Smoothy Member
since 2002-12-02
Posts 119The dark side of the moon |
Doing everything for someone and getting nothing in return. My life's story. Good write. |
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