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Scandalous
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since 2003-04-10
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0 posted 2003-06-09 03:14 PM


The red rose attracted unfamiliar faces
They touched the smooth petals, devoured the aroma and could almost taste it
Smothered by fantasy and trapped by wishes
What was needed was reality, but they dismissed it
With no knowledge of the harm, they still reached out
Soon to feel the pain of what they didn't know about
It was invisible to their engrossed eyes
Because at the time, the rose was preparing their cries
The next touch was the last, the thorn split the skin
The blood seeped out of the wound and they turned away leaving the rose forgotten
The rose was only one hint to them that eventually
Everything is bound to hurt essentially.


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LegalSecret69
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since 2003-06-04
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1 posted 2003-06-09 05:07 PM


hhmm...I really like the whole "rose" idea. You used a good choice of vocabulary in this too...

peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears
2 posted 2003-06-10 02:46 PM


Oh my, oh my! This was a great one! Like your last reply..I feel the same way. Great stuff! Keep writing...! ~Jess

"If a thing is worth doing at all, it is worth doing badly." -Gustav Holst

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