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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow 
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Why does something so beautiful Signify such pain Like a glistening bullet slowly slipping towards my heart ~~~ Sweet cleanser of my soul yet your salt makes my wounds sting further a thousand hurting memories concentrated into one ball so fragile so small yet how you bruise he who created you ~~~ The torment with which you slip down my cheeks slowly, slowly, prolonging my agony as weak as a snowflake yet impossible to remove ~~~ Like some silent snake you merely stroke the surface of my skin yet the marks you leave are so entrenched sinking further than the knife dare penetrate ~~~ But how you are like me alone seemingly unwanted in the world you occupy No purpose Hollow and invisible |
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LegalSecret69 Member
since 2003-06-04
Posts 69Virginia |
I really really liked this alot.....it has so much meaning, and it is so deep. This is really emotional. I just recently wrote a poem of my own about tears. This is great! Keep posting, and I'll definately be reading more of your work....you have an awesome talent! great job!!  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Said I'd look forward to seeing your stuff....and had to wait a slightly negative timespan for it.....I was right, you have insight and your imagery is superb. Check your mailbox, eh? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
you seem to talk of somehting you care so much about but at the end just throw away as if you don't care. this poem says much about you. i liked this one looking for more keep em comming |
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idleeyes86 Member
since 2003-06-09
Posts 64Somewhere over the rainbow |
Yeah I have to admit I wrote this while I was cryin and looking at myself in the mirror and after the one teardrop vanished I kinda just cut through the last bit of the poem without taking much care. |
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