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Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

0 posted 2002-10-27 10:03 AM

HEATHER, I GIVE TO YOU THE ONE THING,
THAT I DO BEST.
MY WORD AND THOUGHT,
ON THIS BIRTHDAY, UNLIKE THE REST.

TAPPA, TAPPA, TAPPA,
SHUFFLE, SLIDE, SLAP, TURN,
SHAKE, PUMP, TWIST, KICK,
SHAKE THAT MONEYMAKER HONEY!

THE LIGHTS DIM DOWN,
SMOKE CONSUMES THE STAGE,
AS WELL AS THE MIND,
THE MIND OF ONE LIL’ TAPPIN‘.

“LETS DO IT!”

OUR LIL’ TAPPIN’ WIPES HER HAIR FROM HER FACE,
TAKES A DEEP, DEEP BREATH,
STAGE FRIGHT HAS NO PLACE,
IN THE MIND OF THIS LITTLE DANCER.

SEVERAL SHOUTS COME FROM THE SEA,
SHE IS PERFORMING FOR THE GODS TODAY,
CLOUDS PART AND GIVE HER THE SPOTLITE,
FROM THE SUN ABOVE.

DISPITE THE EFFORT AND STRAIN,
DANCING IS NOT WORK FOR LIL’ TAPPIN’
THERE IS ONLY ONE WHO COULD RIVAL,
THE INTENCE LOVE OF THE ART OF DANCE.

AS A RAY OF SUN KISSES HER CHEEK,
SHE SEES HIM IN THE DISTANCE,
FINGER AGAINST HIS NOSE,
“I LOVE YOU.” IT SAYS.

CONFIDENCE SKYROCKETS TEN FOLD,
SUPPORTS GIVE HER LEGS STRENGTH,
THIS WILL BE HER BEST PERFORMANCE,
THE GODS WITLL BE PLEASED,
SHE WILL EARN HER PLACE IN THE SUN TODAY.

TAPPA, TAPPA, TAPPA,
SHUFFLE, SLIDE, SLAP, TURN,
SHAKE, PUMP, TWIST, KICK,
SHAKE THAT MONEYMAKER HONEY!

FOREVER WATCHING OUT FOR…
YOUR BIG BROTHER.

Darkness
Member

since 2002-10-17

Posts 202
The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

1 posted 2002-10-27 10:04 AM

Let me explain this one or it will make no sense to you. I wrote this for my "Lil Sis" on her birthday. She is a dancer(no not that kind.) I couldn't think of much else to get her so I got her this.

Darkness

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-10-27 01:06 PM

This is cute. But please, please, please do NOT post poetry in all caps. It's such a pain in the ass to read.

But I do think you wrote this very well. It was hard for me to enjoy because of all the unnecessary capital letters, but you phrased a lot of it very nicely.

A successful ode.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

3 posted 2002-10-27 01:36 PM

i was just going to give a heads up on the caps blip. but it appears brian has beaten me to it again.

good write though.

and a very sweet birthday present.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (10-27-2002 01:36 PM).]

Pollita
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity

4 posted 2002-10-27 08:52 PM

GOOD POEM!....
I ABSOLUTLY LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!
I BET YOUR SISTER WAS VERY HAPPY!!!!!!!!!!!!...NOTHING LEFT TO SAY BUT...
THIS WAS AWESOME!

SailorFirebird
Junior Member

since 2002-10-21

Posts 16
15 Miles North of NoWhere

5 posted 2002-10-28 01:56 PM

awwww, this was adorable. i loved it.

I am Sailor Firebird! Defender of...ummm, STUFF! Behold my clarinet, vito, and the wrath of a squeeky reed!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2002-11-02 03:18 PM

Darkness~
This is a very well written piece, and
such a loving birthday gift for your sister.
She's lucky to have a brother who loves her so much.
Much enjoyed.
~Vicky

P.S. Don't forget to check out Teen Challenge #2!

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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