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Sandpaper (very short)
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Sandpaper (very short) |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571
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You are like sandpaper Rough and hateable Yet you make me smooth again When I need love |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one. It makes complete sense. Nice use of sandpaper as a symbol. I enjoyed this one greatly.  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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Morgana Le Fay Junior Member
since 2002-10-25
Posts 22 |
Some short poems contain more truth in their few lines than the poems twice as long. Besides, I can focus easier when it's short!  I liked this. It was simple. It was straight to the point. It's relateable. Well done. - Jaime by the woods, you hear it creeping, and you know, they're the blood in you |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
I liked this. It's so true. Good work. |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i find that the majority of longer poems just drone on and on and really don't have much of a message. or if they do, it's hidden behind pointless words. it's almost like those people who are in love with the sound of their voice. they talk and talk, but don't really have much to say.  every poet should go through a 'short' phase to learn how to effectively get their message across. good write and thanks for sharing.  /jen/ what if they gave a war, and nobody came... |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
I liked this... Some of your shorts seem to be the best- but truly, i like them all. I never thought about using hateable in a poem- and that's the only thing that upset me about this poem. Hateable. Do you think there might be a better word? I think you could find someting.  (i didn't mean to upset you by that..  )Good right though.. keep it up. ~sara "All are unnecessary evils of a dying republic. We must *write* these wrongs" |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is cute. Isn't it sad how many replies you get by indicating how short it is in the title? Lazy PIPsters...  Liked the poem, though... well done on it. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Ahhhhhh,LP i`m glad i wasn`t the only one who noticed that.lol thanks guys.... *Allison* |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Wow!! I really liked it! Great job sis!!! Ps i am her sister! |
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