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Kevin
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0 posted 2002-10-24 02:48 AM


6:1

Someone had to see this coming.
One day for Him
and six for It.
It was only a matter of time before collection baskets
became slot machine buckets.
And I’m no different.
I see the six o’clock news,
father whoever,
did whatever.
I just wonder,
in who now,
do we trust?


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1 posted 2002-10-24 03:17 PM


Interesting, interesting... in who now do we trust?  Well, I'm not sure to be honest.  I still think it's important to learn how to use our own minds, and trust those... but that really can make us very egocentric, and in that... makes us helpless in the face of things we cannot control.

I'm not sure, Kevin... I'm just not sure.

Oh, love the title.  Striking ratio, definitely has poetic impact on us mathematic types.  

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Kevin
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2 posted 2002-10-24 03:34 PM


lol yeah, and dosent it resemble book and chapter?
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3 posted 2002-10-25 06:58 PM


This rocked completely. I liked it a lot Kevin. You write about some very profound topics. I don't think I could have ever done something like this. Awesome job.

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4 posted 2002-10-25 11:25 PM


i can't even comment on the subject, since it really does upset me.

but you put some real power into these words.  a wonderful job.

i'm beginning to expect more and more from you.

and you continue to deliver.

you're becoming quite the writer dearsir.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

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5 posted 2002-10-26 12:13 PM


I liked this alot. This is something I wonder about too, sometimes. Great job.

*~erin~*

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