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dinky
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since 2002-10-19
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0 posted 2002-10-22 09:28 PM


all i can see is you
my friends dont get it but i do
i think about you everyday
always getting in my way
blocking my thoughts
until my brain rots
away,
i will go
if u dont want me,
then just let me know
all i ask
is that tonight
you hold me close
and dont let me go
-everythings alright

© Copyright 2002 samantha rae - All Rights Reserved
foreverwithyou
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since 2002-10-20
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Wonderland
1 posted 2002-10-22 09:56 PM


dang that was deep I like it
PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02
Posts 439
I am everywhere
2 posted 2002-10-22 10:12 PM


awawawawawww!
You and allison are writign all these cool sweet tight poemy things, and you guys make me look bad.
I really really like this.
I like the way you enend it too..
but i have some bad news...
Your husband is dying.. but i shall leave you this memory-
Love the alphabet.

"All are unnecessary evils of a dying republic. We must <I>write</I> these wrongs"
~Otep

dinky
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since 2002-10-19
Posts 258

3 posted 2002-10-22 10:15 PM


lol (the alpahabet rules!!)
thanx for the replys
and we arent making u look bad specailly not me
but again thank u guys for the replys and one thought
respect the alphabet as well

Local Parasite
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4 posted 2002-10-23 11:09 AM


Interesting read... I love the ending, specifically, as well as the spoken tone of the poem.

This is quite good.  

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Dopey Dope
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5 posted 2002-10-23 01:20 PM


I thought this was a pretty cool little love  poem. Hope it works out.

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