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XxplanoeastcutiexX
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0 posted 2002-10-22 06:36 PM


Creamy or
Hot, it makes my mouth shout
On and on
Chocolate, chocolate
Oh, yum
Luscious chocolate, I can't believe I
Ate it all. It
Tickles my throat
Each time I eat it, yummm I love chocolate.

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Jester
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1 posted 2002-10-22 07:02 PM


Hehehe  very cute....Nice free verse... I like how you started the sentence on the previous line..it made me think while I read...kinda gave a peice like this a little bit of depth.  hehe thanx for the read.

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quietlydying
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2 posted 2002-10-22 07:48 PM


oooh!!

i am the chocolate queen.  my sister makes fun of me so much for it, but i don't care.  i LOVE chocolate!!

and thus i LOVED this piece!

good write and thanks for the read.

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!

::big cheesy grin::

/jen/

ps.  check your email!!



what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (10-22-2002 07:51 PM).]

Local Parasite
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3 posted 2002-10-23 10:58 AM


Sweet...

Chocolate is pretty awesome, yeah.  Although I'm no chocolate queen like our /jen/ up there, I can still appreciate the content of this poem.  

Well written.  Welcome to Passions in Poetry.  I hope you have fun reading, replying and sharing with all of us.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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4 posted 2002-10-23 01:10 PM


Welcome to Passions!

Lemme just say that it's all about the Snickers.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

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