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Pollita
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity

0 posted 2002-10-20 09:13 PM

~~~~~Why I love you~~~~~

Your always there when I need a friend,
When you belive in me I can do anything.
Your one of the bestest friends i've ever had,
You always make me feel better when I am sad.
From the moment I met you I knew you were someone special.
If it weren't for you i'd be hopless,
But instead you chose to help me with this mess I call life
I love you so much i'm afraid of loosing you.
Loveing you comes as easy as breathing,
The question is how can I stop?
....I can't!
I'll love you forever,
I'll always care.
Theres no use trying to fight the feelings I have for you.
So I just gave in....
Thats why I love you!

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-10-20 11:14 PM

Hawww...it's so cute, my little Delaney is in looooove! ^_^

Obviously this is dedicated to someone...hehe, maybe---try not to use improper english, like "bestest"! ^_~

E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh...

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

2 posted 2002-10-21 12:27 PM

i

the word bestest. it makes me think of a really big hug. heh.

but it might be a good idea to steer clear of it in poetry. just a thought.

good write!!

/jen/

to give pleasure to a single heart by a single act is better than a thousand heads bowing in prayer. [ghandi]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2002-10-21 10:33 AM

I liked the poem, but the message is kind of blurred. You love this person because you can't fight the feelings? Wouldn't the feelings you're fighting be love itself?
I don't know......I just thought that a "why I love you" poem would include reasons. However, the poem was pretty well done for what it was trying to get across. I liked it.Hope to see more

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-10-21 12:40 PM

The title is great... hehe... contrary to what Javier thinks (don't listen to that guy, seriously), I like the irony of the whole "I love you because I really can't help but love you" thing. Isn't at all what I'd expect to read when I opened this.

Jen already said "good write," and I think you're entirely deserving of that comment. Nice work.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Pollita
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 220
the unknown realm of insanity

5 posted 2002-10-21 04:44 PM

AWW THANK YOU GUYS!!!!!!

Alex~ Yes i think i am in love...but can't tell you who! ^_~
and yes alex you smart boy...this is deticated to someone...i showed it to them and they loved the improper english...it's so me...well anyway....he knows who he is!

Local Parasite~
LOL....Don't worry...i won't listen to him!...IMPROPER ENGLISH ROCKS...!...Lets a rebel against Alex...LOL...Just Kidding! ^_^

rest of the people~
Thank you sooooo much for coming to read my poetry!
*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~**~*~*~*~*~**~
Chao peoples!

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