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dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

0 posted 2002-10-20 01:44 PM

why do u blame me?
i am being blamed constantly
i want to walk but i first have to crawl
i want to be tall but i still am small
i'm tired of it
all the nagging and being ragged on
i want to go home,
and be safe
in a warm, secure place
its not gonna end up that way
why wont it ?
cuz life isnt always fair
but i've tryed to learn not to care
what people say to me
and what they blame me for
there is no more
for me to say,
until another day
-goodbye

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

1 posted 2002-10-20 01:46 PM

I like the way it ends...
last time you posted you said something about how it just ended- but i like this.

You're a born rapper. !LOL!
ha ha ha ha ha

okay, i'm fine. lol

ttyl

Sara

(i like it, man)

"And the thing is.. is that when I'm singing in, it sounds even better-than when i'm singing out!!"
~Jack Black

lil cherry
Member

since 2002-10-02

Posts 86
Ont, Can.

2 posted 2002-10-20 03:25 PM

good poem, but the rhyming seems a lil forced, i think it could show a lil more emotion if it ran more freely. just a thought, nice work tho.
~~*lil cherry*~~

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

3 posted 2002-10-20 05:28 PM

I think this poem i really really good. Like I said before...GO AWAY!!!! You make me look terrible. lol. I think that the RHYMING and words were perfect.....Eminem...(OR MARSHALL) look out cause Sam`s comin through!!!

*Allison*

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2002-10-21 10:54 AM

I liked it, but you might consider spacing out the posting of your poems. I see so many by you I'm starting to wonder how I'm going to read your great works next week. Slow down the pace, you'll get more replies that way

Well done on the poem.

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foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

5 posted 2002-10-21 10:26 PM

Hey!Will you ever stop??

j/j I thought that this one was good I also liked the -goodbye-that was kewl wish I could wright like you!!

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