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dinky
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0 posted 2002-10-19 07:45 PM


you dont know my name
so i hide in shame
i dont know exactly why i like you
i hope the rumors arent true
i dont care if they are anywayz
there's somethin bout you thats got me in a daze
a trance that wont let me go
i just want you to know
the way i feel about you
the feelings are all so new
i want you badly
so i sit here sadly
writing my confession
it isnt an obsession,
i just miss you

© Copyright 2002 samantha rae - All Rights Reserved
dinky
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1 posted 2002-10-19 07:48 PM


parasite,
i know u said not to post so many so close together but i couldnt wait to post this one but i tryed to wait as long as i could so i just decided to post it
i hope u guys like this one but if you dont just tell me cuz i want you to be honest

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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2 posted 2002-10-19 07:50 PM


awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

Quit banging the phone againt the wall... or the clip board..
I ejoyed reading this piece.

GOOD WRITE, MAN!!!!'

Seriously.

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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3 posted 2002-10-19 07:53 PM



(^^^who's that???)


(^^^who's that???)

"he said 'you're beautiful,
i n s i d e,
but that's about it."

devinechild22
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4 posted 2002-10-19 07:59 PM


YO YO YO WASSUP G!!!
     I loved this one. Good wotk. I can`t believe it! Go away! You make me look bad! LOL

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5 posted 2002-10-19 08:04 PM


it's smokey and the batman, right?
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6 posted 2002-10-19 08:05 PM


Oh, and this poem - liked it... I like your ending, the stand-alone line that didn't have a real rhyme following it.

Nicely done.

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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7 posted 2002-10-19 08:21 PM


It's an inside joke parasite.  

sam... I'm like a [edited by moderator] one man band!!!!!

Jack Black is the shizzzzz!

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (10-20-2002 06:00 PM).]

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8 posted 2002-10-19 11:16 PM


* giggles * 'Ello Fly like bird ( hyper woman sorry )


great job


Riley

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

EleanorMoonbaby
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9 posted 2002-10-20 10:31 AM


Inward singing.... how cool is that? lol!
And not a bad li'l poem. liked the rhyming couplets. Nice one.
Ellie

"Last night, I had a dream that I went to the doctors, and she gave me eight minutes to live. I'd spent thirty minutes in the f***ing waiting room"- S

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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10 posted 2002-10-20 01:37 PM


dude! Inward singing's the best, Ellie!
And the other thing is- when he's singing in, it sounds even better than when he's singing out!

Now Sam... I ejoyed this.. again, and again- and i'm sending it back to the top!!!
Whooooppie!
Right- anyway, weren't u gonna post those other things?? Do it!!

"And the thing is.. is that when I'm singing in, it sounds even better-than when i'm singing out!!"
~Jack Black

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11 posted 2002-10-21 11:17 AM


VERY well written poem. I felt the pain in this one. Very nice.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

foreverwithyou
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12 posted 2002-10-24 06:22 PM


yoyo sam I liked this one man MUHAHAHA lol this was good!!
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