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Your Funk
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Your Funk |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton 
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You make me dance, My veins bounce to your beat! My heart thumps intune with yours. My bodies gone crazy, crazy for you. Your funk fills my fluttering feel, You are all I see. YOUR INSULTS AND YOUR CURSES MAKE ME FEEL LIKE IM NOT A PERSON ~Staind~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought you wrote this one nicely "Your funk fills my fluttering feel" I really liked that like. All those F's make this phonetically fun. A poem muchly enjoyed.  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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Match Member
since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
Thnks  Its all about the funk  YOUR INSULTS AND YOUR CURSES MAKE ME FEEL LIKE IM NOT A PERSON ~Staind~ |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Cool, I gree with Dopey up there! Great job! Ri ~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~ |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
haha... phonetically fun... isn't Javier just a riot? Anyways... I like the tone of this... very funky...  Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Match~ I enjoyed this one...fun and funky. Nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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