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Tamma
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0 posted 2002-10-19 02:47 PM


Late one night, in late November
I was sitting on the couch –
And he caught my glance
Looking at him – I saw something
A glint in his eye? – Maybe. . .
Whatever it was – it was special
I could just feel something about him
Once or twice, I caught him –
Looking in my direction

On the couch downstairs
Cuddling, holding each other
A smile forming upon my lips
Wanting more – to feel his lips
Back upstairs, his arms around me
“You are so adorable” –
With a kiss on his cheek
“What did I do to deserve that?”
A smile forms on my lips
As a friend joins in on the conversation
“Yeah, tell him, so he can do it again”

Standing outside – alone
He’s telling me how he feels
And I’m hugging him every chance
Each of us revealing secrets
We’ve held in for nearly a year
Always thinking of the other
Wondering what they’re up to
Wondering if it will ever happen
Later that night, I got a surprise
He bent down, and whispered –
In my ear: “I love you”


Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

© Copyright 2002 Tamma M. Wilson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-10-19 02:56 PM


Good job, I'm sure the guy is honored to be the topic of a beautiful poem.
lonewolf

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2 posted 2002-10-19 03:13 PM



Tamma~
This made me smile for you inside and out.
What a wonderful day that must have been for
both of you, and you've penned it beautifully.
Thank you for responding to the challenge and
and thank you for sharing this special day
in your life.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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3 posted 2002-10-19 04:31 PM


Very touching, and it was a long one too! Very well done.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

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4 posted 2002-10-19 04:42 PM


Wow, what a special day....how beatiful it reads on paper...awesome job!


Ri

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5 posted 2002-10-19 05:20 PM


This is really touching... see what I mean when I say you should write in specific events, to draw out the length of your poetry a bit more?

Seems this challenge helped you to organize your inspiration a little bit... awesome!!  

Hope we'll be seeing a lot more of you in here, Tamma.  Oh, and nice pic...

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Tamma
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6 posted 2002-10-20 07:35 PM


LoL - this poem was written before i'd even read the challenge LoL..when I read that, I just had to post this   Oh, and each little section is about a different night...If you havent figured that one out yet.

Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

[This message has been edited by Tamma (10-20-2002 07:37 PM).]

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