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PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

0 posted 2002-10-18 04:14 PM

I've just wasted
ten more minutes
of this, my life.
Can we fly away
to the next dose?
Were those the right
words to say?
Rise high, go low,
come back tomorrow.
Mail carriers are late,
one more tear of damnation.
Hug the ground,
bullets fly above.
Sorrows of time wasted,
we sigh, for more lies.
We can die
tomorrow.
Gulp it down,
live today.
We can die
tomorrow.
We can all die
tomorrow.
One more tear of sorrow.

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (10-19-2002 02:16 AM).]

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

1 posted 2002-10-18 04:17 PM

I know, I know, one of my most shyte pieces ever. *chuckles* I'm searching for my style, once again, trying to find the time to look for my muse, for the feel of the pen and paper. Forgive me if you want for shyte pieces I may write along the way, or don't. Thanks for your time.

Sincerely,
Titus

"My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems."

(2002 Copyright)

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (10-19-2002 12:49 AM).]

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2002-10-18 07:41 PM

nicely done here man, but get rid of those *'s.

more more.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

3 posted 2002-10-19 12:51 PM

Dopes, got 'em gone.

LoL. Glad you liked the piece man. It's not one of my favorites, but a piece of every poem I write is a part of me. Did you get my email?

Sincerely,
Titus

"My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems."

(2002 Copyright)

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-10-19 01:24 AM

This is a rather different style, then I'm used to when it comes to you Ti---it's nice to have some variety!

E muja oui, "Hyweyr". Pavune E lyh raym ouin byeh, E ryja du kad ujan so ufh...

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

5 posted 2002-10-19 02:08 AM

this was...

well, it reminded me a lot of something. you really struck a chord with me titus. hmmmmm... kind of sad. but i don't really feel like mentioning what it made me think of.

nicely done old chap.

nicely done.

/jen/

oh, and it's great to see you around more again. msg me boy. i say msg me. :: big cheesy southern hick grin ::

at first i wondered why white oleander was in the six dollar bargain bin.

and then i read it.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2002-10-19 05:06 AM

No I did not get your e-mail.

Are you sure you sent it to the right addy?

dopey_dope@hotmail.com

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

7 posted 2002-10-19 05:02 PM

He never sends me an email...

Anyways, Titus... I think this was pretty good, regardless of what you think of it... so there!

The image of the bullets flying overhead was neat.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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