To whom it may concern(roughness of life)

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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2002-10-16 09:54 PM

When the world collapses
where do you find me
underneath the ruble
of death?
it's scary when you cant wake up
when your world is foggy
dying
I feel crazy
this life can kill us all
too bad
the sun has stopped
exploded in a
diaster of pain
too many weeks
of cramped discord
hard days, harder nights
there's no change in me
maybe some sort of death
to whom it may concern;
I'm hurting
my mind is breaking
the blood drips away
as death becomes reality
when does the world stop turning
I hate this
I feel cold, of so cold
There's a scent in the air
the rancid smell
of giving up

Regina

storyteller.of.poets
Junior Member

since 2002-10-16

Posts 11

1 posted 2002-10-16 09:57 PM

Regina,
I like it, you should post it in Dark poetry too, it has a nice dark conotation to it.

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-10-16 10:12 PM

I'm not sure exactly what to make of this... the imagery is astounding, as per your usual... and you ended on a delightfully disturbing note.

Beautifully written... you've captured the feelings of despair with true expertise. I'd expect nothing less from a truly dark poet such as yourself.

Love the new pic, by the way.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

clumsy
Member

since 2002-10-10

Posts 106
canada.

3 posted 2002-10-16 11:12 PM

hmmm. lovely.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2002-10-17 04:55 PM

I liked the poem a lot Regi! A LOT A LOT!
Very nicely written, and by the way, nice pic.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

5 posted 2002-10-18 03:28 AM

Regina, wow. Like Brian I'm not too sure what to make of this. You always did have such a brilliant ability to make dark pieces even darker but this has me troubled. It is excellently written, no doubt about that, but perhaps this hits just a little too close to home for me to not be biased.

You take care of yourself, ok? BTW, I'm loving that new pic you've got up there. Very nice.

~AF~

"No hesitation, no delay
You come on just like special K
Just like I swallowed half my stash
I never ever want to crash"
Special K - Placebo

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2002-10-18 12:36 PM

I am glad to see you posting again
I've always loved your style of writing
and this is another exceptional one
thanks for sharing again INA

ps. love the pic

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

lonewolf1
New Member

since 2002-10-16

Posts 9

7 posted 2002-10-18 12:56 PM

I'm new to the forum so I've never seen your writing before, but I like it. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

8 posted 2002-10-18 01:50 PM

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

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