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Kandi
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25 posted 07-07-2003 03:07 AM       View Profile for Kandi   Email Kandi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kandi's Home Page   View IP for Kandi

Missed this one somehow...kicking myself now.

Haha to the critique message.

As for the poem, I can really only say that I thought it was incredibly creative and strong in metaphor. I completely dug it. Amazing job, but then again you never cease to amaze.

~Kay

Just wanna be funny,looks like the joke's on me.
So call me Captain Backfire.

Kit McCallum
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26 posted 07-07-2003 07:51 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Well now, here's a name I've missed seeing on these boards. I loved this Javier, the symbolism and phrasing are excellent. I'd love to hear if you've been writing some more ... I miss you around here.

Come home, will ya?
Great big hugs,
/Kit
dertah
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27 posted 07-07-2003 01:11 PM       View Profile for dertah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dertah

haha, most excellent read dude.  i loved the way you used the black widow, totally awsome, haha.
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28 posted 07-08-2003 12:11 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Javier, I don't think I've read any of your poetry before, but I really love this. I hope that you come back soon and let us see some more of your work.  

"If I know there's no possible way I can change something....I push it to the back room
in my mind & slam the door on it." Gary~  Heart hugs, Ethel

Spice
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Resting in my cardboard box.


29 posted 10-16-2004 01:59 AM       View Profile for Spice   Email Spice   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Spice's Home Page   View IP for Spice

How horrible am I? I never posted a reply....I feel so ashamed! (Not ot mention pathetic...It's 1 AM on a Friday night and I have nothing better to do than to look up old poetry and what not on the internet....) To be honest, It took me like 5 minutes to remember how to even post a reply! haha
Anyway, so here I am, trying to make up for it.
You're right, it is different, very different. No deep hidden meanings, no crazy psychological play on words...(Or hey, maybe I'm just getting smarter! haha) But it still let lose obvious emotion and feeling. I don't think it is one of your best, but I still think it's something to be proud of- as all your work is. As alway, Hats off.
 
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