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quietlydying
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the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2002-10-13 12:30 PM


because of brian and our talk of poorly ventilated rooms.

:-_+_-:-_+_-:-_+_-:-_+_-:-_+_-:-_+_-:-_+_-:-_+_-:


A distortion
of reality
is all they ever
chalked it up
to,
while you still
rambled
something
about spaghetti
being blue.

And the kite flies
                                    
                                  rrrr
                              eeeeeeee
                          hhhhhhhhhhhh
                             gggggggg
                               i i i i i i
                                hhh
                                   i
                                    g
                                     h
                                       e
                                          r
                                             .
                                                .
                                                   .


/jen/

i just haven't been the same since that house fell on my sister.

[the closest thing i've found to heaven is sitting here talking to you.bif naked]

© Copyright 2002 jennifer elizabeth - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-10-13 12:42 PM


Interesting Jen, interesting. Once again, a library piece.
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2 posted 2002-10-13 01:11 AM


OH MAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That poem was amazing. I caught it on many different levels. But but but, I also SAW IT!!! i saw the kite fly, seriously. Very well done. I loved it. One of the best poems I've read here in a long long time. haha....truly. Amazing...

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3 posted 2002-10-13 03:28 AM


I had to smile at this, Jen. You know why.

Another thought provoking piece. I really hate you sometimes.

~AF~

"It is far more difficult to murder a phantom than a reality." - Virginia Woolf

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4 posted 2002-10-13 09:20 AM


Was the blue spaghetti thing about veins? Was it? Huh? Am I right? Am I annoying you yet?!
Seriously?
Very interesting. The kite thing makes it a very visual piece. Well done!
Ellie (from the library that looks nothing like a library!)

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5 posted 2002-10-13 09:13 PM


no, the blue spaghetti had nothing to do with veins.

i was very:
            the influence
             -----------
             [this is me!!]

just like my cat likes cat nip.

so just now i realised where i got that saying from.  but please, i don't like to talk about veins.  for obvious reasons.  ask around if you need to.

/jen/

i just haven't been the same since that house fell on my sister.

[the closest thing i've found to heaven is sitting here talking to you.bif naked]

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6 posted 2002-10-14 09:32 AM


I've read this a couple of times now and the only thing I can think of is interesting, anyway it's a great poem and good to read, thanks for sharing

Andrew

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7 posted 2002-10-14 12:37 PM


poorly ventilated rooms... mmm...

keep flyin' high, /jen/.

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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swimming in fairy floss...........
8 posted 2002-10-21 10:25 PM


WOWOWOWOWOOW


Loved this. Hate you.

Blue spaghetti is what you get when you pour Blueberry Blast cordial over your plate of worms

Seriously Jen, you write to make me jealous...there's no other explanation to it! No, my kite flies higher when there's wind...yours is just plain weird. ^_~


Are you scared?                BOO! Are you now?

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swimming in fairy floss...........
9 posted 2002-10-21 10:29 PM


eh...clickity click


Are you scared?                BOO! Are you now?

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