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LoneWolf
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0 posted 2002-10-10 04:21 PM



“Confusion”

Tell me why this is
Explain how this
Can be
I just don’t
Understand
I just don’t understand

You said not to worry
That you loved me so
And to me you would
Stay true

You gave me every reason
To believe
What you said was true

With all the calls
And words of truth
Of where you’d been
And what you’d done

Tell me why this is
Explain how this
Can be
I just don’t
Understand
I just don’t understand

But then with him
You began to talk
Believing what he said
Of his life and past

I warned you to stay away
I asked you to be careful
But still you kept on
As if I hadn’t said a word

Then he asked you if
You would like come on over
You said yah sure
That sound like it might be fun
But the one thing  you forgot
Was to tell him about me
Tell me why this is
Explain how this
Can be
I just don’t
Understand
I just don’t understand

You called and said that
You were worried
That something may happen
I told you not to go
Still you did not listen

But here the
Story ends
Or does it just begin

You went despite
My warnings
And you did
The one thing
That can never be
Taken back

Tell me why this is
Explain how this
Can be
I just don’t
Understand
I just don’t understand
How this can be
I just don’t understand
How you could do this to me
I just don’t understand

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

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1 posted 2002-10-10 04:54 PM


this poem made me sad, not many things can do that. i liked this thanks for the read
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2 posted 2002-10-11 08:06 AM


This is an extremely sad poem, I hope you are ok? if you want to talk you can e-mail me

Andrew

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3 posted 2002-10-11 07:33 PM


Oh man, that's deep and painful. Ouch. *hugs*
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4 posted 2002-10-11 07:40 PM


Sounds like a song due to its repetitive lines (chorus?). The powerful in the poem was felt completely. Your feelings completely entered me (uh oh). very well written. I've also been there man. I feel you.

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5 posted 2002-10-12 11:30 AM


Not bad at all... you've captured the feeling of confusion rather well.  The repetition of "I just don't understand" was well moderated, I like how you intensified its use as the poem went on.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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