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LoneWolf
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0 posted 10-09-2002 07:49 PM       View Profile for LoneWolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for LoneWolf



“Love Remains”

Falling down
I can’t stand up
Searching for a hand to grasp
I look for you
All I see
Is pain

Pain
Digging deeper
Cutting me
To the bone
Make it stop
This icy dagger
Of deceit

Deceit
Deaf ears and
Mute tongues
Upon blind eyes
Which you gave to me
With broken trust

Trust
Gone
None left
To give
Yet some
Must be found
For what remains
Is still love

Love
Stays
Within
Through tragedy
We remain
For our love remains
Lest trust and hearts
Be broken once more

But I pray it never
Comes to pass
For pain can heal
And deceit can die
Trust can be
Mended
In time
But love remains
© Copyright 2002 Colin Heffernan - All Rights Reserved
Marshalzu
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1 posted 10-10-2002 08:45 AM       View Profile for Marshalzu   Email Marshalzu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marshalzu's Home Page   View IP for Marshalzu

Ooh I like this a lot, I liked the use of enjambments but couldn't understand why you didnt follow this through all the way through the peice, it is however a great read, thanks for sharing it with us

Andrew

Always and forever

LoneWolf
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Thanks for the reply.

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.
I've learned that even when you th

Deep_Inside
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3 posted 10-10-2002 05:01 PM       View Profile for Deep_Inside   Email Deep_Inside   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deep_Inside

I really liked this one to

Deceit
Deaf ears and
Mute tongues
Upon blind eyes
Which you gave to me
With broken trust

i think that this part was grate
thanks for the read
Local Parasite
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4 posted 10-12-2002 11:34 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

I also noticed the use of enjambments, it's done really well in this piece... and I do see why you didn't just draw one long one out, because you had multiple points to make and had to change your subject matter from time to time.  You see, Zu is a bit of a devoted lunatic, and he loves to take one concept and push it throughout an entire poem.

He usually turns out something really good, though, so I shouldn't comment.  

Nice work here, man.

Parasite

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Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Star T
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5 posted 04-15-2004 09:57 AM       View Profile for Star T   Email Star T   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Star T

Damn lonewolf u are talented.i'm ur newest greatest fan.i just might end up reading almost all the poems u ever posted here.isnt it just sad when love begins to show its true colors.(not perfectly perfect)

Jesus died that you might live...accept that and u shall be saved.

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