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Sinful_Steph
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0 posted 2002-10-08 01:52 PM


This was a poem I had written for a youth hostel in Toronto.  They wanted something that helped describe what they do and issues that alot of teens need help identifying or dealing with.


There are so many issues
That we have to face
Not the type of issues
That we can erase

Having safe sex
Is something to pride
You don’t want AIDS
From which victims have died

Sexually Transmitted Diseases
Another big scare
Having a baby
A responsibility to share

A bed to sleep in
Food to eat
A place to shower
This isn’t the street

There are many hostels
To which you can go
To shelter from the rain
Wind, hail or snow

Just pick up the phone
Call just one
Try it out
It could be fun

Meeting new people
Food to eat
A place to sleep
Let’s beat the street

© Copyright 2002 Stephanie Di Ginosa - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-10-08 08:55 PM


How true? This is really cool, I loved it.........
Ri

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2 posted 2002-10-10 09:48 AM


A very good poem and a very worthy cause may I add, thanks for sharing it with us

Andrew

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3 posted 2002-10-10 11:48 AM


Very true! So much so...I can't really think of much to say! I liked it---I unno, I find something fairly...sturring about this peice!

All I do, is think about you...

cherish
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4 posted 2002-10-21 08:16 PM


I bet it served it's purpose well. Simple but useful- a good mix


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ShadyMakaveli
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5 posted 2002-10-21 09:04 PM


not to shabby, i liked this, i'm a fan of rhyming.
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6 posted 2002-10-22 01:55 AM


i'm just curious about one little thing.

why would this be for a youth hostel?  do you mean youth shelter instead?

seeing as a hostel is an inexpensive place for young people to stay when travelling abroad.  more of a boarding house, as opposed to a shelter.  you are charged to stay in a hostel.  it's not a free shower or bed or free food, and they aren't geared towards homeless teens and young adults.

sorry.  ::shrugs::

i'm just a little confused.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

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7 posted 2002-10-22 09:58 AM


Jen's more than just a little confused.  

I like this, but like she said, hostels are just places where youth can crash for cheaper than a motel.  Although the words "hostel" and "shelter" are metrically identical, which means you can easily just substitute the word "hostel" for "shelter" with no negative repercussions.

You chose an effective form for this poem, something simple for a simple message.  Much enjoyed, and the message is an important one.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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8 posted 2002-10-23 12:46 PM


I thought this was pretty good. I liked it a lot.

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