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anawnda
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0 posted 2002-10-08 11:24 AM



         Kurt you came late.
         I almost chickened out.
         Gen got scared of the wildboar
         that was hitting on her

         It didnt hurt much...
        
         It was over before it began.

         I know you're a pro...
        
         Im glad I did it.

* you can hurt me...with your bare hands,or
you can hurt me using the sharp edge of what you said.....* jewel kilcher

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1 posted 2002-10-09 03:27 PM


This is very vague... I don't know what to make of it, exactly.  The vagueness of this piece is really enhanced by the fact that you kept it brief, and used a lot of pronouns like "it."  

Nice work.  I'll come back to this a few times to see if I can interperet it a bit more, maybe I can figure out what it refers to...

Or maybe someone will reply in this thread calling me a fool... hehe... whichever.

Parasite

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Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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2 posted 2002-10-09 07:59 PM


Parasite: You fool!!! ( hehe i had to say that cause he said....yea.....go Riley )


Great poem...loved it!

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

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3 posted 2002-10-09 11:24 PM


Did ya'all get tattoos?
Maybe went bull-riding?
Hmmm... interesting.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

anawnda
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4 posted 2002-10-17 09:46 AM


actually i got my navel pierced, i just went and did it for myself, i guess i wanted to prove to myself i can do it


* you can hurt me...with your bare hands,or
you can hurt me using the sharp edge of what you said.....* jewel kilcher

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