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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-10-08 08:06 AM



cast off the shadows
of the nightly world
spring to life
in the majesty of this kingdom
for up in the window
a madian so fair
laughing the night away

she holds in her hand
a fresh yellow rose
no doubt from the garden below
but in the background there is such
a blue rose hanging there
simply blue for the pity

pray for the lady
in the old stone window
surrounded by people
adorning her every command

every morn' as she awakens
to the sun risen up past the moon
the silverly shadows tossed away
lifes taken flight in the cresent moon night
for nothing not even soul lays there

people come rushing for the madian is gone
yet still they worship her cornflower hair
laying beside the fair madian are two
singing in the night for yellow and blue

do not cry dear servents for she shall be back
everytime you hear her song
and see her flowing hair in the window
think to youself and only to you
she is singing in the night for yellow and blue

** I hope you get my meaning by this...this is the first poem of this kind I have tried to write so......**


~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

[This message has been edited by Riley (10-08-2002 08:08 AM).]

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Chloey
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1 posted 2002-10-08 10:49 PM


Riley i dont care what any one says ur are such an awesome writer and AF can get a life!!


                 *$*Chloey*$*

lil cherry
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2 posted 2002-10-08 10:53 PM


speechless....that's amazing, so touching, soo....wow!
~~*lil cherry*~~

lil cherry
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3 posted 2002-10-08 10:53 PM


speechless....that's amazing, so touching, soo....wow!
~~*lil cherry*~~

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4 posted 2002-10-12 12:22 PM


Very well done.  I love the departure from your normal style into this kind.

You did this extremely well, and the meaning is not lost on me.  I'll talk to you about it on MSN so that I don't influence anybody else's interperetations of it.  

Fantastic writing once more.  I'm beyond impressed, Riley... this has got to be one of your best.  I hope that you do this sort of thing again.  I'm putting this into my library.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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