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0 posted 2002-10-07 11:53 PM



Regret assults me
  when I am lonely.
I wish the past could be
  even though it can't.
I shared with you
  a special love:
Introspective and doomed...
  I like to think we
could once more be two
  even though we didn't work
The first three times.

© Copyright 2002 Rhonda Adolph - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-10-08 08:46 AM


I sooooo get this!!
It's hard to live with the pain of regret- but I've grown to understand that if you hold on too long- you lose sight of those who want to be part of your future. Besides, they eventually call it stalking.  

Nice work here... just check the spelling on a few things, and you've got perfection.

Jenn


Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

[This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (10-08-2002 08:46 AM).]

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2 posted 2002-10-08 05:31 PM


Wow, this is such a brilliant poem, it is very well written and an interesting read

Andrew

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3 posted 2002-10-08 09:12 PM


Loved the critique message.....I wouldn't exactly know what breaking up is like, because sadly I have never had a boyfriend, but I know it has to be hard.....Great poem....very well written....


Ri

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4 posted 2002-10-08 10:51 PM


great poem totalle know the feelins, it sums it up really well. good job.
~~*lil cherry*~~

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