Phew I'm glad I finally got a chance to read this one Great work, your formatting is perfect, the rhyming scheme is great, and the rythm is better than I've been able to do in a while (and I used to be the queen of rythm hehe). Anyway, this is definitely good, I like the way you stuck "crystal" in every stanza. Awesome!!
It is said the Creator has taken a handful of South Wind and given each newborn Arabian the power of flight without wings
Ahh yes...I read this the other day and I swore I replied because I stuck it in my library but I guess I forgot to leave a lil' note telling you how much I adore this piece. I especailly like the contrasting of "crystal raindrops" those two words you just wouldn't think of together and yet you make them work so perfectly. I love the second stanza it's my favorite. ~Live and Laugh~
The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again ~Bella~
North of Hell