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blueyedlioness
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0 posted 07-05-2003 01:41 PM       View Profile for blueyedlioness   Email blueyedlioness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for blueyedlioness


Crystal raindrops on my heart
Falling from the starless sky
Dripping down my face and mixing
With the tears I cannot cry

Crystal melodies surround me
Quivers only I can hear
In the silence is my music
Made by someone else's tears

Crystal thoughts are slowly falling
Like the raindrops in my mind
Searching every stranger's eyes
None the one I need to find

Crystal hearts are softly breaking
Shattering deep within their hurt
Pieces scattered by the careless
All they have left is their words

Crystal echoes leave no memory
Only a slight familiar ring
Of the melodies made by raindrops
Long forgotten they could sing
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1 posted 07-05-2003 01:54 PM       View Profile for Song_for_Serenity   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Song_for_Serenity

"Crystal echoes leave no memory
Only a slight familiar ring
Of the melodies made by raindrops
Long forgotten they could sing"


Beautiful... absolutely beautiful. You're a great writer. Have I told you that, yet? Anyhoo, have a spiffy day!

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

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2 posted 07-05-2003 05:51 PM       View Profile for dertah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dertah

wow.  excellent work.  you seem to express everything beautifully.  something i wish i could do.
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3 posted 07-05-2003 06:07 PM       View Profile for Skyfire   Email Skyfire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfire

Phew I'm glad I finally got a chance to read this one Great work, your formatting is perfect, the rhyming scheme is great, and the rythm is better than I've been able to do in a while (and I used to be the queen of rythm hehe). Anyway, this is definitely good, I like the way you stuck "crystal" in every stanza. Awesome!!

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4 posted 07-06-2003 09:03 PM       View Profile for *Belabebeautiful*   Email *Belabebeautiful*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for *Belabebeautiful*

Ahh yes...I read this the other day and I swore I replied because I stuck it in my library but I guess I forgot to leave a lil' note telling you how much I adore this piece. I especailly like the contrasting of "crystal raindrops" those two words you just wouldn't think of together and yet you make them work so perfectly. I love the second stanza it's my favorite.
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Kandi
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I'm definitely putting this in my library...it was so beautiful and the flow was absolutely perfect. Thanks for the awesome read. You have such a talent.
~Kay

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Kandi
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6 posted 07-07-2003 01:37 AM       View Profile for Kandi   Email Kandi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kandi's Home Page   View IP for Kandi

...Probably works better if I actually check the library thread box
OtherSideOfTheMirror
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7 posted 07-07-2003 12:00 PM       View Profile for OtherSideOfTheMirror   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for OtherSideOfTheMirror

W
O
W
!

That's pretty much all I ever have to say about your stuff.  I really, really like this.

~cassi
zenny
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8 posted 11-09-2003 03:20 PM       View Profile for zenny   Email zenny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit zenny's Home Page   View IP for zenny

library!!
love it
misao
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9 posted 11-09-2003 07:19 PM       View Profile for misao   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for misao

Now Im inspired to write a new poem. I didnt feel like writing one but now I do!!! Keep up the good work!
 
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