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Deep_Inside
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

0 posted 2002-10-07 01:33 PM


Things get hard
every day
i try to escape
another way

demons come
from all around
and my soule
ready to be found

being touched from within
depression takes hold
everytime reaching deeper
another demon gets showed

and every moment relapses
i find myself in an unconshious state
serching once agian
i find a red lake

[This message has been edited by Deep_Inside (10-07-2002 07:58 PM).]

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eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
1 posted 2002-10-07 06:26 PM


i like this description of depression, just a suggestion, instead of a red lake i find...i find a red lake, so it keeps the rythym, just because it through me off aat the end, but good write...eor
Deep_Inside
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding
2 posted 2002-10-07 07:57 PM


that is what is was ment to be

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