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Teen Poetry #6

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Riley

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since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-10-06 02:17 PM

sensous grass worshiping my ankles
falling all around the prespiration
touching the untouched welts before
a thousand unkempt secrets
arousing the soul hearted wish

flirting with the suns rays
my flushed skin burnt again
nothing can compare to the 3rd degree
with which you have bestowed upon my heart

laying in the cold soft grass
the ground supporting my heafty weight
thinking the unthought for a million years
revisited by only a single tear

for this is what i should for
should
but shan't for life has to much to offer
another couldn't begin to close
the wounds which have formed
all because of my selfishness
stupidity shines through
yet so does my sweetness

you thought you loved me

you were wrong

so i think

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

[This message has been edited by Riley (10-06-2002 02:18 PM).]

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-10-09 10:56 AM

Beautiful work, Riley! I have no critiques for this piece. You wrote it extremely well.

I liked "unthought." That was really cool.

Parasite (sorry I accidentally used my old account)

All images begin in mirrors and end inside our subconsious.
~Genesis P-Orridge, "Thee Reversal of Fate"

[This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (10-09-2002 10:56 AM).]

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2002-10-10 09:45 AM

An incredibly good write and a very enjoyable read thank you for sharing it with us

Andrew

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