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Teen Poetry #6

Kind Venom

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

0 posted 2002-10-05 11:03 PM

I cant exspain what you do to me,
One minute you're here,
Then you're there.
I try to grasp you,
But you fly away through mid air.
It's just so complicated,
You are like a dream,
When im asleep,
I taste your kind venom.
When im awake,
I still just can't exsplain,
Why are you putting me through so much pain.

~*Azi*~

[This message has been edited by Match (10-05-2002 11:54 PM).]

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-10-06 02:29 AM

Kind Venom... nice concept...

You've developed it wonderfully, as well... a good contribution. Bravo.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

2 posted 2002-10-06 09:41 AM

A really good idea eloquently put, well done, I enjoyed this

Anya

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2002-10-13 07:26 PM

Yeah the kind venom is a great concept. It's what brought me into the poem. I liked the poem too. well done

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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2002-10-14 12:47 PM

Kudos

clumsy
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since 2002-10-10

Posts 106
canada.

5 posted 2002-10-14 12:49 PM

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

6 posted 2002-10-14 01:00 AM

Eh...maybe they just need to be told..y'know? There are some really dense people out there who are just not in tune to othere peoples feelings. Tell em that theyre hurting you by doing A B or C...

Nice write...

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