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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-10-05 10:43 PM


silence

the most deadly thing
know to man kind
alone

bleep bleep
microphones tell a story
through the sultry voice
which flows from her lips

slowly...so slowly
her voice starts to fly
taken onto the wind
it carries across the vast fields
filled with hopeful faces

up and down
up and up and down down down
the voice goes
in and out of chorus and verse
scales float from forth her vocals

the peak of the song
her voice rings then silence
again the voictreous* silence
then one clap another and another

soon the room filled with excitment
chills run down the young girls spine
the sweat doesn't seem to matter
all that might be is that applause
enough

her bow
last and only
bow


* =sp?

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

[This message has been edited by Riley (10-05-2002 10:44 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-10-06 02:27 AM


Bravo!  This is narrated with untouchable talent.  You drew a very intricate image in my head.  I like the brevity of the title, it compelled me to read... and the poem really delivered.  

Absolutely wonderful work, Riley.  This has got to be one of my favourites from you.

I love it.  

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Riley
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2 posted 2002-10-06 11:31 AM


Parasite: Thank you very much.......I don't know where this came from I just started to write......Thanks again!
Ri

~* Love humiliates you, hatered cradles you-White Olender *~

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3 posted 2002-10-10 09:53 AM


A very interesting read, wrote extremely well and something that I'd want to read again and again, thanks for sharing

Andrew

Always and forever

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