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Riley
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in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-09-27 10:01 PM



blue crystals shine in the heavenly sky
cascading along with the suns briliant rays
touch me now your hands so gentle and soft
washing along the curves of my face
yet pulling down on my body holding me there
is the love and force that makes us one
shunning wistful calculations of x plus y
instead getting lost in the depths of your eyes
where i shouldnt be i have been a thousands times
playing the game with excellent agility
i shall not lose to anything except you
your soul shall over power my small figurine
yea wrapping around me like a sensule hug
are the steely blue eyes that i adore
flashing a quick smile with a flirtatious kick
laugh now with your perfect case
never a flaw to be found
if i should turn an angel
i would make every dream and wish come true
yet souly this shall never happen
i am half only human
just a single hearted girl
asking you to love me to

~*Theres a sparkle in your eye that only i see, and theres a place in your heart where only i wanna be*~

© Copyright 2002 Riley Grant - All Rights Reserved
devinechild22
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1 posted 2002-09-27 10:42 PM


this is a beautiful poem. it is wonderfully written. this expressed a lot of emotion. i really liked it..good job.
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2 posted 2002-09-30 02:11 PM


I love the description here, Riley.  The way you wrote of the bodies and the physical interactions between you and the other in the poem really gave me a strong visual.

Well done.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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