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Deep_Inside
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

0 posted 2002-09-27 02:58 AM


lyeing here
in my room
waiting for
empending doom

sitting across
a desert waist
my mind becomes
a milky past

i man not think
so i just let it be
with her eyes
staring back at me

when i'm alone
my hole wrips in to
begging for the one
who thought you so true

adrellin rush
sharting with fear
welling for the _ _ _ _!
so vary near

things are starting
to make sense
don't know what it is
but it's intense

two different sides
i do see
but like a moriior
back at me

i burnt myself
to be set free
but i found
thats no longer me

it was there at the start
but now it's from the heart
and for all the time we where gone
we where never really apart

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eor
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since 2002-09-26
Posts 959
blues & greys
1 posted 2002-09-27 03:58 AM


nice...eor
Local Parasite
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2 posted 2002-09-30 01:54 PM


Nice work.  I like the ending of this poem, but what is the _ _ _ _?  Please tell.  

Oh, and I love your critique message!  

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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