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Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

0 posted 2002-09-26 02:49 AM

To: The Girl I Love

Sparkles drifting magically,
Forming enticing love.
Spinning, twisting, turning...
Into a gift from up above!

Although that gift's been tested,
Tried---through and through.
With a gentle kiss, a loving touch---
I see that gift is you!

The removal of your essense,
Is enough to drive me insane...
I quake, I quiver---
At the mere sound of your name!

Although you might not see it,
I love you more than life...
I wait, I cry, I plea...
For the day you'll be my wife...

I love you!

All I do, is think about you...

[This message has been edited by Android 17 (09-26-2002 03:43 AM).]

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

1 posted 2002-09-26 02:55 AM

what a sweet piece.

a very lucky girl she is.

a very lucky girl indeed.

nicely written.

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-09-26 03:14 AM

Heh-heh! Thanks! ^_^

All I do, is think about you...

knightlyshadows
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 791
obscured vision

3 posted 2002-09-26 04:37 AM

aww this is beautiful alex dear. i hope she knows how much you love her *peck*.

quote:
Although that gift's been tested,
Tried---through and through.
With a gentle kiss, a loving touch---
I see that gift is you!

“A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.”

Getting away, isn't Running away.

"The hurt that you try to hide, is killing me."

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-09-26 10:13 AM

Don't worry---she knows! *smiles*

All I do, is think about you...

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

5 posted 2002-09-26 05:31 PM

Great read

Andrew

If your reading this signature I have replied to your poem, please repay the compliment :)

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

6 posted 2002-09-30 01:40 AM

Tsk tsk... "life" and "love" are so tricky to rhyme. You work in a narrow spectrum, and come up with a result that's nothing really new.

Being a jerk about it,
Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

7 posted 2002-09-30 04:23 AM

...Erm---I've only rhymed the second and last lines of each stanza. Each stanzas have their own rhyming phrase...

Life is on the bottom of the poem...and love is on the top. So Riverwood...what are you talking about? :S

All I do, is think about you...

rimmie
Junior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 45
Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

8 posted 2002-11-09 10:39 PM

Hmmm...Alex, Alex I am rather flatered...you were always one with words...

I love you to baby!

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