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anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

0 posted 2002-09-24 10:09 AM

You are my security blanket,
spreading a feeling of warmth and safety as I clutch you in my hand,
your beauty and appeal is that of familiarity,
knowing you will always be there, knowing you will always be the same.
You may be torn and beginning to fray around the edges,
but I don't care, to me your imperfections make you perfect,
and however far I may wander,
I will invaribly need you at some times in my life,
to make me feel safe and contented,
to make the night feel a little less long,
to become even more saturated by my tears.
So you are my comfy old sweater, slightly time-worn, that I wear on the coldest january nights,
my little bit of sentimentality that I will never let go,
you are my security blanket

[This message has been edited by anya (09-24-2002 01:00 PM).]

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-09-24 01:44 PM

Haaaaaaawwwwwwwww---I loved this! Namely the line, "to me your imperfections make you perfect" Now, THAT my friend is love! ^_^ I know how that feels! Most definetly!

Great work---nice imagery and metaphors!

All I do, is think about you...

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-09-24 05:17 PM

i wish i could know how that feels. the closest thing i have to that is a real security blanket. i sleep with it every night. lol. i`m a dork. but i think this was a great poem..

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

3 posted 2002-09-24 05:51 PM

hey! i liked this one, i agree with Android 17, good use of metaphors and imagery! great job

You can close your eyes to things you dont want to see,but u cant close your heart to things you dont want to feel.

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-09-25 11:04 AM

This is actually pretty good. One thing I have to comment on, though, is your reuse of the first line as the last line. I don't really like when people do that in their poetry. Maybe it's just me, but I'd rather see that revised, or done away with.

Just my opinion, of course. I like the affection you display in this poem for an inanimate object (although it's probably an extended metaphor referring to a person... whatever

). Very well done.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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