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CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2002-09-23 11:54 PM


I thought of this walking to school this morning... It's a song, and it's not very good right now.  Any ideas on how I could make it better would be greatly appreciated.  I just kinda had the idea and in English I decided that I needed to get the ideas written down.     Thanks!

I WOULDN'T KNOW WHAT TO DO

John Walker was an outdoors man
He had a daughter, son
And a love for guns

Every fall he would clean his guns
Have them packed up and in the truck
Take his dog and his boy
And kiss the girls goodbye

Then one day
His wife asked

Chorus:
John, why do you always have to take the boy?
Why don't you take the girl this time?
And he said
One...  I dont think she can shoot a gun
Two...  I just wouldn't know what to do

But he took his girl
And walked straight through
As he hung his head
And little was said

As they sat there in the tree stand
And the buck slowly approached
He handed her the shotgun
And told her when to shoot

Chorus

As they pulled into the driveway
A smile upon his face
His wife looked kind of puzzled
When he told her
"That girl sure can shoot"

Chorus

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

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cherish
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........
1 posted 2002-09-24 03:23 AM


hehehe...loved the ending Codies...nice to see something from you in so long.

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

Local Parasite
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since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg
2 posted 2002-09-24 03:04 PM


This is very sweet, in a country-ish kind of way.  

I really enjoyed this.     Good job.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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