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Kevin

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since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2002-09-23 08:45 PM

They aren’t there.  I do not see them.
Not in my calculus formulas,
or my psychology textbook.
They do not walk the bottom line tickers of stocks and athletes,
or line the bottom of twelve-ounce cans and zip lock bags.

No, they aren’t there.
There, behind the lunar eclipse of front porch patriotism.
There, behind the tear filled eyes of a nation in mourning.
There, in a desert of loneliness and mothers letters.
They aren’t there.
I do not see them.

I'm on my feet, I'm on the floor, I'm good to go
All I need is just to hear a song I know

[This message has been edited by Kevin (09-24-2002 03:11 PM).]

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

1 posted 2002-09-23 09:11 PM

This one struck me as a little confusing. It could just be me being non-American and all...or, I could just be ignorant...whichever...

You may also want to change the spelling of "Morning" - "Mourning"
I assumed that's what you meant.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

2 posted 2002-09-23 10:16 PM

i liked this poem.i think it stimulates the thought process. it made me think i don`t know bout everybody else. it prolly did tho. great write. i love u. lol j/j

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

3 posted 2002-09-24 04:07 AM

Wow...It's short, yes, but thought-provoking and nerve-touching all at the same time. I'm not going to give you my interpretation of this poem, cuz as I sat there, I confused myself of whom you were refering to as 'they'. good write kev, I'm going to look out for more of your poetry.

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2002-09-24 06:57 AM

I *think* that I have a general idea as to what this is leaning towards but I refuse to put my idiocy on display and be wrong.

If it is what I think it's about, you've written about it well. Thanks for posting, Kevin.

~AF~

"No wonder I do not make people comfortable. I am a mirror. I have far too many things to say." - Mouthing the Words

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2002-09-24 07:24 AM

But Kevin...what is that right behind you?

No, my young friend, you are not being paranoid...but the media would have us think that they are everywhere. Should we be vigilant? Yes. It comes down to knowing WHO you invite to stand upon the front porch, under the flag.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-24-2002 07:26 AM).]

LadyDracaWolf
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since 2002-09-19

Posts 73
CA

6 posted 2002-09-24 09:32 AM

This particular poem struck me as a little odd, however, being a high schooler, I wish that all my dreaded Math homework would also disappear. Alas, the way to do that has elluded me...

Death is not extinguishing the light;
it is putting out the lamp
because the dawn has come.

Rabindranath Tagore
Poet, Philosopher, Nobel Laurea

Kevin

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since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

7 posted 2002-09-24 03:04 PM

This is about american soldiers.
I could easily be one of them. But I neglect and underapreciate them as I live out my life and the things that are important to me. School, Sports, Drinking...

But their are americans dying out there. And we dont see them, We are blinded by are patriotism, (lunar eclipse) think about it

This poem is about neglect, and taking lives for granted

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

8 posted 2002-09-25 10:57 AM

I agree that patriotism is a blinding thing, yes. There are people out there dying, sure, but they aren't all american soldiers.

As long as you can understand that, I will agree with your sentiments.

Lovely poem, by the way.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

9 posted 2002-09-25 02:53 PM

your absolutely right, I revoke the word american

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

10 posted 2002-09-26 03:07 AM

i love the way you chose to describe this topic. especially the line 'There, behind the lunar eclipse of front porch patriotism.'

such beautiful wording.

you wrote about it in such an eloquent fashion.

i very much enjoyed it.

kudos.

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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