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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571
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i hate the way u laugh i hate the way u smile i hate the things u do but i love u all the while i hate the way u talk i hate the way u think i hate the way u think that u can get away with a wink i hate the way u dress i hate the way u act i hate the way u think that u can stab me in the back i hate the way u make me feel i hate the way u drive me crazy i hate the fact that after all of this i want u to be my baby ---------------------------------------------------- sorry i think the last line is cheezy but i couldn`t think of anything else.... |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
aw.... is this about that one guy!? Um.. there's this one song by SugatCult called "the way" it's kinda like this. You should DL it. It's really good, and so is this.  You should download some mudvayne songs too.. heh. Lol, i should be advertixing on my reply. Anyway.. GREAT WRITE!!! write more, and more, and more. I'm tellin him!! j/j ~sara "I didn't feel so bad till the sun went down. Then I come home.. |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
oh yea.. did he ever wink at you!?  |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
yes sara this is about mike....u can say his name u know lol. i don`t think he winked at me but he did some other stuff like that.....yea i think i might ask him somethin monday........ |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Oh wow, at first glance I was thinking, did I reply to this already? Then I just realized it was someone with the same icon as me, and the same font style...  Curse you, foul doppelganger! Anyways, on to your poem... I think it was alright, maybe a bit cheesy but that was probably due to the persistence of beginning each line with "I hate the way." Maybe if some lines were to omit the first two words and just start with "the way," it would sound a bit better. Just my opinion, really. Nice write nonetheless. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people Before you place your poetry before the people. ~Andrey Kneller [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (09-22-2002 12:21 PM).] |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
HEY!!! I WAS HERE FIRST! Just joking, Parasite, sorry about 'being the same as you'. I'll willingly change my icon and such. Anyway.. allison- I just wanted to read this again.. Well written, and that SugarCult song is just calling your name!! ttys, Sara "you never dreamed you'd have to live your life so guarded, |
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