The Losses That Never Heal

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Teen Poetry #6

The Losses That Never Heal

DewDropRoses
Junior Member

since 2002-09-18

Posts 20
WV

0 posted 2002-09-20 02:46 PM

The Losses That Never Heal

I'll always have this emptiness
This feeling of despair
The needing and the wanting
To always have someone there.

The pain and the suffering
The scars of the heart
To learn the lesson of love and loss
Failing to listen from the start.

The loneliness and darkness
Loss of confidence and hope
Wishing for something out of reach
Pushing hard to cope.

I'll always have this emptiness
The wish of this not being real
For these are the scars of the heart
And the losses that never heal.

Copyright © 2001 Amy Marie Hess

LadyDracaWolf
Member

since 2002-09-19

Posts 73
CA

1 posted 2002-09-20 05:07 PM

This poem touched a chord in me, having lost my father earlier this year. Losing one you love is one of those wounds that can never heal completely.

Death is not extinguishing the light;
it is putting out the lamp
because the dawn has come.

Rabindranath Tagore
Poet, Philosopher, Nobel Laurea

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

2 posted 2002-09-20 10:52 PM

This is really great.
It held a simplicity that didn't deconstruct the intellegence and sophistication behind it but added to the meaning and flow. That kind of writing is hard and you did it well.
At face value the poem is easy to understand yet reading deeper there are many other ideas and images that come into play.
Good work.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2002-09-21 11:45 AM

This isn't bad, Amy. I have to admit I liked your others more than this, so far, however. Maybe it's just my taste, but hey, c'est la gout, non?

You'll probably get a stronger response to your poetry if you stagger the posting of them. I noticed you posted five yesterday, that's generally not very well taken. I'd also rather have a more steady release of any one poet than be subject to three at a time.

I'm only giving you some advice. Take it or leave it.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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