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DewDropRoses
Junior Member

since 2002-09-18

Posts 20
WV

0 posted 2002-09-20 02:44 PM

For The Sake Of A Promise

Basking in the shadowed moonlight
She lies crippled next to the shore
While droplets of salty tears trickle down her cheeks
And her mind ventures back to years before.

Memories softly touch her darkened mind
Encasing her soul with their heated pain
Bounding the heart with their deadly grasp
Still mourning a love she shall never have again.

The oceans ripples gently wash over her feet
Offering a release for her shattered heart
But her soft hands hold tightly to her tears
For the sake of a promise and a love she will never depart.

Copyright © 2002 Amy Marie Hess

[This message has been edited by DewDropRoses (09-21-2002 02:49 PM).]

LadyDracaWolf
Member

since 2002-09-19

Posts 73
CA

1 posted 2002-09-20 06:10 PM

This is one of the most heartbreaking poems I have ever read. The sensitivity of a promise broken is incredibly portrayed in the words and the feeling permeates this piece.
Keep writing.

Death is not extinguishing the light;
it is putting out the lamp
because the dawn has come.

Rabindranath Tagore
Poet, Philosopher, Nobel Laurea

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

2 posted 2002-09-20 09:50 PM

Wow there was some sophistication and elegance here that is really, really impressive.
There was also vivid imagrey that narrated the poem without a typical narrative style which I personally don't like yet seem to find myself using constantly.
Well done here. Applause is deinately deserved.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2002-09-21 11:43 AM

This is breathtaking, Amy. You've got a great knack for complex imagery... your work is almost always candy for the senses. I love that in a poet.

I felt myself truly wondering about what might have brought on this poem... whether it is about you, someone you know, or if it is simply a narrative... borne of the innermost reaches of your mind. Regardless of this, you expressed it wonderfully.

Excellent work again, Amy.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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