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I'm your little cattle Ma

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sean_krazy
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since 09-14-2002
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0 posted 09-14-2002 03:57 PM       View Profile for sean_krazy   Email sean_krazy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sean_krazy

Iím your little cattle Ma

I said once ĎI hate youí,
But now you flew away,
I am terribly alone.
I wish I could cry on my knees,
So I could be in your grace again.
Iím your little cattle ma,
But whereís my shepherd?

All the times you yelled Ďpleaseí,
You never got the better part of me.
You clung on to your dreams
And never flew away with it.
I nudged you to wake up,
But you wouldnít.
You carried me for months,
nurtured me for years, now
you lye inside of me.

I know I canít fly,
But Iím more than any bird.
I am not naÔve,
For I realize I am wrong.
Mama, donít you cry,
I have dreams like you,
And I am awake.
But I will disclose to no one
Till these clouds sweep me off my knees
So that one day I could meet you
And say ĎIím your little cattle ma,
I love youí

Sean

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Dark Enchantress
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1 posted 09-14-2002 10:37 PM       View Profile for Dark Enchantress   Email Dark Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dark Enchantress's Home Page   View IP for Dark Enchantress

The poem as a whole was wonderful, but the second stanza was my particular favourite. I love the emotion and reality of this. Or at least it felt very real to me and not only that but also expressed in an interesting way. I hope to see more from you.

Welcome to Passions.



"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (09-14-2002 10:38 PM).]

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


2 posted 09-15-2002 07:01 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Sean, a very good first post!  Welcome to Passions, and I, too, shall look forward to seeing more of your writings!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

Local Parasite
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3 posted 09-16-2002 12:32 AM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

This is simply beautiful.  I absolutely love the style of writing you adapt here, a kind of narrative addressing of your mother... and the descriptions of yourself...

Especially the ending, that was fantastic.  I can't wait to read more from you.

Welcome to Passions.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Kielo
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4 posted 09-16-2002 02:10 PM       View Profile for Kielo   Email Kielo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kielo

This was amazing. Very beautiful. I loved it, and hope to see more from you! Welcome to Passions!

Kielo
cherish
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since 03-25-2001
Posts 6045
swimming in fairy floss.......


5 posted 10-20-2002 09:37 PM       View Profile for cherish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cherish

Nice

WELCOME!


Are you scared?                BOO! Are you now?

quietlydying
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the wonderful land of oz


6 posted 10-20-2002 09:56 PM       View Profile for quietlydying   Email quietlydying   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for quietlydying

excellent job.

and welcome to passoins!!

/jen/

to give pleasure to a single heart by a single act is better than a thousand heads bowing in prayer.  [ghandi]

Dopey Dope
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7 posted 10-21-2002 10:45 AM       View Profile for Dopey Dope   Email Dopey Dope   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dopey Dope

Nice to see you have 20 posts and have posted this one poem for now. You participate well and it does not go underappreciated.
As for the poem, I did enjoy it. Very creative. Welcome to Passions. I hope you have fun here. Keep posting mah boy.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

Susan
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walking the surreal


8 posted 04-17-2004 01:24 PM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

Found you.  This is truly beautiful.  I so understand.  You write very well, full of emotion.

Susan
 
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