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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... 
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My feelings cause the decay of long-brewed maturity. They hide from my eyes the bitter taste of truth. Reason, reason, reason, it's gone, so gone from me. With you. The essence of calm so easily lost. Nothing I can do to unflutter my heart. Absence is nothing but time away. Time to think, time to ponder, time to know... I miss you already. My feelings cause the decay of long-brewed maturity. They hide from my eyes the bitter taste of truth. Reason, reason, reason, it's gone, so gone from me. With you. Things suddenly sting like a poorly made movie. My thick skin is now no softer then that baby's little butt. (Cute, ain't he?) What can I say? What should I say? All I know is... I miss you already. There are no more mole hills, dear, only mountains. My feelings cause the decay of long-brewed maturity. They hide from my eyes the bitter taste of truth. Reason, reason, reason, it's gone, so gone from me. With you. With you. [This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (09-13-2002 12:11 PM).] |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I think this is my favourite of all I've read from you. It feels very sincere. It just feels. "you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There are those poems, Daniel, where repetition of key lines only add more depth to the intensity...this was one of those times. Good work! |
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sean_krazy Junior Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 33 |
interesting poem sean (sean_krazy) |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I liked this poem very much. Especially the time section. Maybe its just me. Anyway, I always enjoy your work. Kielo (Hows that? Want me to edit it? LOL jk) I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe... |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Nice seeing you again, Titus! Long time no read.  I see you're coming along in your poetry. A nice one-sided dialogue here, almost epic in feel by the way you describe it. I have to admit that the molehill/mountain reference was an eyesore, in my books. Trim down the references to cliches if at all possible. Overall, quite impressive. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
 Titus "I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Titus~ This is an excellent write, my friend. I absolutely love it. I especially enjoyed these lines... "There are no more mole hills, dear, only mountains." Very cool...me likes...a lot! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-30-2002 01:35 AM).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ack.......she liked the same thing I did. "There are no more mole hills, dear, only mountains." Yeah, those lines were really great. I think it sums up the whole poem- hey the title probably came from it hehe. Very well written.  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Muchas Gracias, mi amigos. Sincerely, Titus "My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems." |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Very well written Titus, I must admit this is my favourite peice by you, it's very intense and an extremely good read Andrew |
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clumsy Member
since 2002-10-10
Posts 106canada. |
this is one of my favourites |
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