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0 posted 2002-09-12 09:39 PM



Out of sight, out of mind
Now how will I respond in kind?
Don't want to see you now at all
Just go away and let me fall.
Leave me be, just go away
Maybe I'll be nice to you again some day.

*This isn't towards anyone here, it's towards my so-called friends*

© Copyright 2002 Rhonda Adolph - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-09-12 09:58 PM


I've definately felt this way before. Hang in there, alright? Cool poem.

*~Meredith~*

"Before you slip into unconsciousness,
I'd like to have another kiss..."
*The Doors

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2 posted 2002-09-13 02:45 AM


This was a really great poem. You have a skill I think I'll never learn; how to be brief... I think it was great.

However, I had trouble with the last line. Maybe its just me.

*grins* I really liked this one...

Kielo

I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe...

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3 posted 2002-09-13 03:27 AM


yay thank goodness i'm a real friend!!! hehe girl you owe me a letter!!!!
robin

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

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4 posted 2002-09-13 04:44 AM



Just hugs.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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5 posted 2002-09-13 11:58 AM


I like, I like it. Im curious, is this towards here or there? Let me know.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

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6 posted 2002-09-13 11:59 AM


I like the title, by the way. Seems erilly(sp) well-timed, if you ask me. Anyhow...

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

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7 posted 2002-09-13 12:45 PM


I have a "friend" who needs to hear this message.

Nice work
Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

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8 posted 2002-09-13 02:53 PM


There are two kinds of people. There are those who will create time with you and there are those who will waste it. So I guess what you need to ask yourself is -how much time are you willing to waste?

Good poem. Brief and direct. My favourite kind.  


"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (09-13-2002 02:55 PM).]

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9 posted 2002-09-26 05:25 PM


*hugs* This is a really good poem, I'm not sure whether that it frustration or anger but you can almost feel the emotion in this peice, thanks for sharing it with us

Andrew

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