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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-10-08 06:27 PM

The clouds
In formation
Migrated south
This morning.

Advance guard perhaps
To the gales of winter
They surveyed the
Half sleeved denizens
And reported them
Ill prepared
For siege

I watched
As they trailed the wind
That whistled again
So they might know
What direction to follow

And thought of
Another chill season
Spent in cold sheets
Un-warmed by close
Radiating 300 count chillblains
When naked skin
Meets their white plane.

I used to enjoy Fall.

But then again
I used to be
with you.

[This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (10-08-2002 06:41 PM).]

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-10-08 06:29 PM

Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

Radrook
Senior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 648

2 posted 2002-10-08 06:50 PM

Impressive!
Enjoyed the poem.
Thanks for sharing.

[This message has been edited by Radrook (10-08-2002 06:51 PM).]

jellybeans
Member Elite

since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

3 posted 2002-10-08 06:56 PM

you are on a roll today...I have felt this 'chill' but have never been prompted by my muse to write it...course could never write it this well.....lol....maybe my muse knows when to be quiet.....nice write cpat

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

4 posted 2002-10-09 10:15 AM

Excellent. A poem for "all seasons". Bob

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

5 posted 2002-10-09 10:21 AM

It always seems
the cold of the turn
brings out the once warm
thoughts of yesterday...

and the reading
just begins
again...

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

6 posted 2002-10-09 10:21 AM

Wonderful writing and not at all what I expected. I hope you find someone soon to warm you and your cold sheets.

Hugs, Marti

Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2002-10-09 10:41 AM

yes, a powerful write, vivid with a sharp ending that struck this reader between the breastplate and the spine
upon reading the tilte...I was certain it would be a 'season' poem, it did address two kinds of seasons, too

but the playful part of me, the poet, also thought of Robert, the preliminary to Frost,

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2002-10-09 10:53 AM

Everything does seem sweeter when it is experienced with someone we love and who loves us in return. May your next autumn be a sweet and joyous one!

Fine piece of writing!

Linda

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2002-10-09 04:52 PM

Both Robert and Jack would be proud.

(frost, not kennedy!!!)

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

10 posted 2002-10-09 05:02 PM

"I used to enjoy Fall.

But then again
I used to be
with you."
=========================================
Ooooh myyyyy...how I love this...
Goosebumps...you gave me goosebumps...
(And very obviously rendered me speechless.)
Excellent write~Hugs.

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

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