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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2002-10-08 01:37 AM


The summer of her discontent
a circle game of circumvent
of polka dots in disarray
reeling in surreal, displayed
across the Bay of Mandalay
that drew her near and faraway
scattering her loves lament
connected to her hearts content
tortured by her tormenting
in contrast of her contemplating  
accenting her own argument
to care enough and give consent
framed inside her own event
a picture perfect paradise

in time where love eludes~


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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2002-10-08 04:19 AM


I think my polka dots are in disarray now...James
the_loner_23
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2 posted 2002-10-08 11:02 AM


I like it

Cold hands means a warm heart

Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2002-10-08 11:06 AM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Lori, this felt so very sad, sweet friend, I know how heatbreak can accent arguments like that and arise such doubt and I pray faith again returns to those who feel like this and love will again be within grasp forever! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Canada eh.
4 posted 2002-10-08 11:08 AM


Love it Lori!!
The title pulled me in and the words are brilliant!
~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2002-10-08 12:24 PM


Another wonderfully written blues serenade!

There are many quote-worthy lines, here are a few:

"The summer of her discontent
a circle game of circumvent
of polka dots in disarray
reeling in surreal, displayed..."

EA

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Deep in the heart
6 posted 2002-10-08 12:31 PM


I see them all the time and cannot tell if they are in disarray or not

I love your work

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

ShadowRider
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since 2001-07-14
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USA
7 posted 2002-10-08 09:18 PM


simply mahhhhvalous the way you pick almost any subject and can turn it into wonderful prose.
I especially enjoyed the metaphor of how a 'connect-the-dots' puzzle cannot be accomplished if the numbers are not in order.
There is only one writer that writes like you, Lor, and that is a VERY good thing!  
*smiles*  Jeff

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8 posted 2002-10-08 11:04 PM


Have so missed seeing you here, I go lost in this (all good) it really drew me in.... sweet lady...be well


Lauren~

I need some distraction
...oh beautiful release
Memories seep from my veins

Madame Chipmunk
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9 posted 2002-10-09 06:20 PM


I think my polka dots are in permanent disarray...
It must be a poet thing...
A very beautiful write
~
polka dot chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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