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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-10-07 03:29 PM


A holy man of a different tradition
a labyrinth to walk--transition...
     beat-heart-beat
     (spirit rattle)
     Dreamtime
     spent in BATTLE.

Kundalini--fire--kindled.
Chakras spinning, shining beacons...
I WILL to pause this ceaseless breathing
to hear the wisdom of this deacon.

Who is this man who does enchant
High Priestess of Immortal Dance?
I'd give him not a second glance,
but in one glimpse I dared perchance...
I blushed to look into his eyes.
Now All I've Ever Known is lies.


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bsquirrel
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1 posted 2002-10-07 03:34 PM


I knew it!
You ARE the reincarnation of Laveau!!!
Cool. Shall I X thine tomb?

Anyway...
take away the mystical qualities of this piece,
and you have naked, raw hurt.

Y'know, whenever I repost Open 6's,
they sink to the stony floor of PIP.

I think my early poetry is cursed.

Blabbering

brian madden
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ireland
2 posted 2002-10-07 03:48 PM


The ethereal ambience of the main body of the poem is shattered in the last two lines

I blushed to look into his eyes.
Now All I've Ever Known is lies.


There are no favourite lines here, each line is perfect. I find myself humming Patti Smith's Ghost Dance now. Anyway rambling, Enjoyed this poem more than I say. Sing on Poetess.



El riesgo vive siempre!

Capricious
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since 2002-09-14
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3 posted 2002-10-07 04:15 PM


I am glad you reposted this.  I would have been less for missing it ...

Short, Sweet, and Stirring.

garysgirl
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4 posted 2002-10-07 04:55 PM


Serenity Blaze, ditto to what Capricious said....I'm glad you reposted, too. Though I don't completely understand every aspect of these different types of write, I do find them very interesting. You are a very talented lady. Thanks for sharing.

Love to all...
Ethel..garysgirl

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2002-10-07 07:27 PM


smiling thank you much---just my little commentary on how one moment can change a lifetime of perspective.

Thanks again for reading.

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
6 posted 2002-10-08 09:36 AM


Now it just wouldn't be a worthwhile trip in here without reading at least one of yours and so now I feel more complete.  So many moments we have each day but there is something to be said for those few that seem to get tangled into our souls.......

carriages of thought are your words always

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