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Tim
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0 posted 2002-10-06 09:12 PM


Around a far and distant star,
...beyond the milky way,
A world unknown in orbit spins,
...on this, this very day,
Upon far planet's highest peak,
...exists an instrument,
A telescope built by a man,
...with dreams by heavens sent.
Lone man upon far distant peak,
...gazes out to space,
Out across the universe,
..to an unknown distant place.
He spies a twinkle in night's sky,
...a planet near small star,
A minute speck amid the cosmos,
...so very, very far.
He takes a pause, thinks to himself,
...could life exist somewhere,
Other than my little world,
...someplace, somehow, out there.
Not a chance, the odds too great,
...such thought is just a dream,
As he gazes out in space,
...upon earth's distant beam.

[This message has been edited by Tim (10-06-2002 09:54 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-10-06 09:14 PM


...someplace, somehow, somewhere...

yes...

out there, somewhere...

smiling, nearby...

WhiteRose
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2 posted 2002-10-06 09:17 PM


He takes a pause, thinks to himself,
...could life exist somewhere,
Other than my little world,
...someplace, somehow, somewhere.
Not a chance, the odds too great,
...such thought is just a dream,
As he gazes out in space,
...upon earth's distant beam.

Yes it does, someplace, somehow, somewhere

some great stuff!

"The first rule of poetry, write what you know."

WhiteRose
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3 posted 2002-10-06 09:19 PM


geez..this new browser does not save anything, picked an icon at random, and poof, I'm a cowboy now.

"The first rule of poetry, write what you know."

Poet deVine
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4 posted 2002-10-06 10:57 PM


An excellent reverse perspective! I like it very much.
garysgirl
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5 posted 2002-10-06 11:12 PM


Tim, I enjoyed your poem very much. I felt like I was looking through space to the distant planets....Thanks for sharing.
Best Wishes,
Ethel....garysgirl

ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2002-10-07 07:35 PM


Well thought and well penned...the larger scheme of things. ThisDiamond
Radrook
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7 posted 2002-10-07 11:08 PM



Very thought-provoking.
So many stars, galaxies by the billions.
Yes, very, very, thought provoking indeed!

Enjoyed!

ecrivan
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8 posted 2002-10-08 12:14 PM


Just what I'm thinking about when hearing about another 'planet', Quaoar, that takes 288 years to orbit the sun according to scientists...nice piece


Gentle Spirit
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9 posted 2002-10-09 07:00 PM


Possiblities exist......yes they do.  Personally, I like dreaming on distant stars.....   Well done!

If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

vandana
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10 posted 2002-10-09 07:15 PM


enjoyed
the_loner_23
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11 posted 2002-10-09 07:16 PM


Awesome

Cold hands means a warm heart

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12 posted 2002-10-09 08:35 PM


There has to be more out there than just "us". Good write here Tim. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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