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Friday Night at Wal-Mart

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Balladeer
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0 posted 10-06-2002 12:52 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


It's Friday night at Wal-Mart!
I am set and dressed to go!
It is time to get a head start
To the greatest place I know.
Parking lot is full already
Though the night has just begun
Hey! It's Friday night at Wal-Mart!
This is gonna be such fun!



I can see the Wal-Mart shoppers
Seeking bargains left and right
Young and old and teeny-boppers
Buying everything in sight.
Grab a large bag or a small cart
Load it up till it gets full
'Cause it's Friday night at Wal-Mart
And I'm charging like a bull!!!



Take a walk to Sports department,
Grab a putter....practice putts.
People eye me in amazement
Thinking I am slightly nuts
Maybe so but I've a good heart
Never bothered anyone.
It's just Friday night at Wal-Mart
And i'm having lots of fun!!

Over to the Book department
Read my favorite magazine
Browse through Time, S.I. and Newsweek
Reader's Digest, Silver Screen.
You won't ever catch me fall short
Of the news that's happening
When it's Friday night at Wal-Mart..
It's an academic thing!!!



I may ogle pretty misses
Dressed in shorts and mini-skirts.
In my mind I send them kisses
Though I don't overtly flirt.
Love to watch the girls in tight shorts
Reach for items on the shelf.
Yep, it's Friday night at Wal-Mart
And I just can't help myself!!

Shoe department is my next stop,
Look for something comfortable..
Sneakers, loafers, boots and flip-flops
Try them till I've had my fill.
Never buy them - I just like to
Revel in the way they feel.
It is Friday night at Wal-Mart..
Such an economic deal!



You can saunter to the Snack Bar,
Grab a dog and cherry coke,
Have a meal that will go far
Without making you go broke.
Have a seat and watch the shoppers
Walking up and down the aisle.
I love Friday nights at Wal-Mart!
How they always make me smile!

There are other things to do here...
Try out toys in Juvenile,
Head on over to Electronics,
Watch some t.v. for a while.
Sniff the flowers in the Garden Shop..
Their perfume fills my nose.
There is so much more to Wal-Mart
Than a rack or two of clothes!



But it's late - my age is showing
And I musn't overdo.
Time to get my body going
Now that Friday night is through.
Week-end's now off to a great start
Since I had a real good time
Spending Friday night at Wal-Mart
And I didn't spend a dime!!!!
© Copyright 2002 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 10-06-2002 01:02 AM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

So that's where Tracey is!!!
They have senior citizen bingo every Tuesday morning at the Wal-mart here.  I hear it's a great place to pick up babes!!!
Good one, Michael!  
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2 posted 10-06-2002 01:18 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I'm sure Wal-Mart would LOVE this Mike. It's going to be a classic! You have the talent for seeing things poetically.
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3 posted 10-06-2002 02:14 AM       View Profile for Radrook   Email Radrook   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Radrook

Thanks for the tip mate!
That's where I'm taking my next date!

Liked this humorous poem.
Thanks for sharing.
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4 posted 10-06-2002 02:29 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

HEYYYYY, Balladeer. I like this and so will all the other Wal-Martians out here. I felt like I was going from department to department with ya'll. I lo-o-o-ove Wal-Mart, too...and I love your poem, too. very good. Thanks for sharing it.

Best Wishes To All From
Ethel/garysgirl


P. S. I like all those graphics, too. How do you get them there?!?

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-06-2002 02:30 AM).]

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5 posted 10-06-2002 04:20 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

whooooohoooooo can I go with you to Wal-Mart it sounds sooooooo great Deer

enjoyed the read a lot

((Hugs))
Charisma
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6 posted 10-06-2002 05:42 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

Well Mike they do slash prices. But you don't ever slash the quality of your poetry.
This is excellent.

I have windows XP and I can't get topic review to come up when I click on it.
If you're a windows XP'er then maybe you know what's happening???
Other than that keep wrtiting them up!
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We got nothing like that here, the fancy
shops in town have three departments,
booze, clothes and food.
But you can't be the country shops, no bigger than an our average US bathroom stall with a crazed couple behind the counter who insist on preforming searches on shoppers to see you nicked any of those 10 cent lollipops while their backs are turned.
Ranting and attempting humour...not working here.
I'll leave it the humour to the great Balladeer. Good to read you again.   


  

El riesgo vive siempre!

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8 posted 10-06-2002 08:33 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Remind me never to accept a date with a Walmart shopper. I've got better things to do...Dairy Queen, Pop Pop's Pizza, Dollar Store... But I could never say it like you do.
C'est Magnifique!
Liz
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9 posted 10-06-2002 08:46 AM       View Profile for Munda   Email Munda   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Munda's Home Page   View IP for Munda

Ok, ok, you finally convinced me... next week Friday - Geesh the things you do to get a date! Great poem Mike and lots of fun to read.
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10 posted 10-06-2002 08:48 AM       View Profile for SmartChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SmartChick's Home Page   View IP for SmartChick

This is a wonderful Wal-mart poem, Balladeer! If anyone can write a perfect poem for Wal-mart, it is you. Thank you for the journey through Wal-mart. Where I live, that is the only big shopping store to go to.
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Was that you?
in aisle two?
and dor
in aisle four?
DeVine was fine
as Sy bought more!
Nan ran around
[first time
in town!]
Was that you?
in aisle two?
In OUR WalMart?
THIS town?

LOL...great rhythm, cute rhymes...
c'mon back, any time!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (10-06-2002 08:54 AM).]

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12 posted 10-06-2002 09:36 AM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Oh Boy!! WalMart!! Oh Boy!!   lol.  This was an awesome read. I think all of us at one time or another has wandered the isles looking for "something" on special, especially for us. Hey! Who doesn't like a bargain.....or simply people watching?Meet ya in the candy department! Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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Balladeer~
Just the PERFECT laugh for this Sunday morning !

I KNOW you met Marsha, Kethry and Krissy on Aisle #7 !

You quack me up .... Honest Injun !
(and YOU need inspiration ?) ... LOL !
You ARE inspiration !
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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I hadn't realized how much fun I had been missing out on! Guess you know where I'm spending my Friday nights from now on!

Wal-Mart would love this---except for the line, "and I didn't spend a dime!!!" haha

This was such an entertaining read---and with pictures and all! Thanks for the morning pick-me-up piece!

Linda
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You’re my kind of party animal. I actually do this for entertainment. When I was younger, I'd also take new cars out for a drive. And, likewise, I wouldn't spend a dime.

Thanks,
Melton
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16 posted 10-06-2002 10:39 AM       View Profile for NewEnglandlazurlu   Email NewEnglandlazurlu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for NewEnglandlazurlu

Screaming Laughing!!!

Michael, you are too much for the small screen and WOW, this is such a treasure.

Hugs, Marti

Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away.

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What a treat to find you shopping
In the mall on Friday night,
Balladeer, there's no debating,
This was such a true delight!

What a smile, I got from reading,
All your antics at the mall,
Rhythmic, cadence overflowing,
Such a grin, you gave to all.

Sigh … your writing's always brilliant …
You have such panache and style;
I could follow every movement,
As you went from aisle to aisle.

Now I know where you've been playing,
So, my 'deer, let's make a date;
At the WallMart, I'll be waiting,
Friday night … at ten to eight!  

~*~

LOL ... you've gotta know I just loved this Michael ... excellent writing!    

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (10-06-2002 10:48 AM).]

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I really enjoyed this, Mr. Deer...hmmm, I wonder if they have a WalMart in Maui?
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You worked really hard to write this...
Superb Michael....  And you are right,  ya
don't even have to spend a dime....
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LOL is this what I have to look forward tooo??? Meet ya there..... fun write, as we expect from you...


Lauren~

I need some distraction
...oh beautiful release
Memories seep from my veins

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Friday night at Wal-Mart
I think I've missed you there
I was dancing through the aisles
But didn't see you anywhere

I was looking for some Spam
Because I liked the taste
It appeared you'd ate them all
Isn't that a waste

So you are a Wal-Mart rooky
tried out all but nothing bought
Balladeer you dirty rascal
You are smarter than I thought

Titia



Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

[This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (10-06-2002 03:40 PM).]

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I too was at our Wal-Mart
on this past Friday night.
I always get a bargain
and I don’t’ even have to fight!

I got some new “personals”
in a pretty shade of blue,
the quality is sure to last,
experience tells me this is true.

I give up my eBay Friday nights,
to walk each and every isle,
before I know it ~ my cart is full,
I’ve collected quite a pile.

I stop in for a carmel sundae
to see if there’s men around,
Yes Wal-Mart is the store for me,
best pickup place in town.

Your poetry makes me try,
to rhythm and to rhyme,
I loved this Wal-Mart poem, Michael
You make me laugh every single time.

    



Howdy Neighbour
            
Sharon  

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (10-06-2002 03:19 PM).]

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Duncan....Tracey's at senior citizen's bingo? Methinks you are in big trouble!!!!

DeVine One..Not sure they would like the ending! Thanks for reading..

Radrook...LOL! She'll love you for it (maybe)

garysgirl...Wal-martian! I LOVE IT!! (I'll e-mail you on the graphics)

Charisma...Hey! I've missed you so much I'll take you anywhere!!!!

ethome..I thank you, friend. Yes, I'm an XP'er but I don't have that problem...sorry.

Brian...LOL! Actually you described that pretty well. I can picture it! Thanks for reading, Sir Madden..

Liz...if I ever showed up with you at Wal-Mart all of the other men would turn Walgreen!

Munda...Deal! Ask Titia about Wal-Mart. I think Marsha got her there once or twice!

SmartChick...thanks! In some towns Wal-Mart is the only social club, too!

Sunshine...that was me (but in aisle three), buying Spam in the house of Sam, watching you walk down aisle two

Nightshade..Aw, you must feel right at home in the candy Dept along with all the other sweets *wink*

Marge....met them? I spent time in the camping department where they had pitched a tent! I hear they've taken jobs a security guards so they can stay there overnight!!
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Earth Angel...there are so many delights around we don't recognize. It all depends how we look at them....have fun!!

Melton...Wow! You're my idol. I never went that far, didn't feel like dealing with car salesmen....did have real estate agents show me a few houses, though

Marti....Glad you like it!! There's a smile down every aisle at your local Wal-Mart store

Kit...Friday night at ten to eight?
      Kit, my dear, you have a date!
      It's the only way that I'll
      Get to walk you down the aisle!

MArtie...sure they do - it's called Maui-Mart!! Have a wonderful trip!

Barry...aha! A fellow traveler down the pathways of delight! Thanks for reading...

Greeneyes...well, if you're not there you better be on Target!! Hey, it's not such a bad fate...

Titia..When Wal-Mart gets a shipment
       Of their weekly load of Spam
       A small alarm sounds in my head
       And-WHAMMO!- there I am!
       So meet me there on Friday
       And I'll offer you a bite
       Then, afterwards, perhaps we'll have
       A little dutch delight!!

Mysteria...in my wildest dreams I cannot picture you inside a Wal-Mart! Oh, the chaos and the sound of screeching cart wheels flying up and down the rows! The second a price dropped, you would be there...and there!...and there!! I would pay greatly for a video of that!!!
    Thank you, m'lady!!

      
 
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